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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
>>>Not one of my best but I wrote it a while ago, I've noticed most of my poems are not even 10 lines lately so I figured a longer one was overdue. well n/eways I hope ya like it<<< "Observed Observer" Timeless, formless is the sand A particle of dust that watches the land Stirred by rushing consuming tides Carried by wind in whimsical strides The roar of the ocean and its infinity Rivaled by the call of the birds flying near divinity Endless streams of meandering light Shining from a sun nearly blinding ones sight Sweetness of bright tropical flowers Wrapping ones mind in thought for hours With no thought of the cruelties of life Nor a thought of sadness or strife A land not destroyed still whole still pure With no wars, battles, or hate to endure Beautiful light fading with the setting sun Signifying work is over and the day is done Feeling the warmth of the sun fading to night Looking up at the stars, all marvels of a sight Each one twinkling with it's own special light Inspiring the mind to take it's own flight A shining sphere of light in the night she resides Without a thought or a whim she pushes the tides A salty mist, a cold brisk wind Looking back at seas which have no end Bonds not made of love or trusts Only forceful winds with powerful gusts No need for such things as emotion No loss of trust or lack of devotion The oceans knowing ones depths sky knowing the heights Sharing the warmth of the morning and the darkness of the nights >¶Øʆ< |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
So many good lines and couplets to take out but Id fill the whole screen... This captured a beautiful image that is very clear to see... great one.. prolly my favorite of yours ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree with Jeremy. Your imagery in this poem is awesome! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful description! Very much enjoyed this beautiful poem, lovely imagery and form, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
*plays intro of smells like teen spirit* well hey this was a nice one. I liked it a lot poet.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
thanx everyone. Even though this was one of the first ones I wrote I'm glad you enjoyed it. >¶Øʆ< |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I was going to tell you that you don't have to worry about making sure to post longer ones, but now I've decided to ask you to post more Nice job on this one."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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orange()alligator Junior Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 21 |
great poem poet, i have read a lot of your stuff..keep it up! :-) -orange()alligator |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
With no thought of the cruelties of life Nor a thought of sadness or strife A land not destroyed still whole still pure With no wars, battles, or hate to endure I loved that peice. Great poem, it looks like you spent a lot of time on this one. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
well thanx lucidity, but actually no I didn't spend alot of time on it. I don't spend alot of time on any of them actually. I might rewrite a line or two later on but thats about it. Thanx again everyone. >¶Øʆ< |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok i was going to point out wut i liked the best then i found another one to point out, then another..so ive decided that the whole thing is simply fantastic. the imagery is amazing and you wrote this soooo wonderfully!!! great job on this PoD. i havent read alot of ur stuffs b4..but this is my fav by u thus far. library time. tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome imagery...i enjoyed this greatly i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Although this is from ages ago, it is definitely my favourite at the moment! You are such a talented writer that each of these lines jumped off the computer screen at me. These lines are the best: "A shining sphere of light in the night she resides Without a thought or a whim she pushes the tides A salty mist, a cold brisk wind Looking back at seas which have no end" Excellent job, Tony. You rule.  ~AF~ Life is a mystery to be lived, not a problem to be solved." |
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