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Screwing Up |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Pass the pipe hit the bong, Where did my life suddenly go wrong? I'm lying here it's a quarter to three, And for some reason I can barely see. The next thing I know I hear people running into my place, As I noticed a puddle of blood by my face. The last thing I heard was the police officer let out a sigh, And explaining to my parents how I was going to die. I am only 16 I kept trying to say, Asking myself why I couldn't have lived my a life a better way. My life could have been happy instead of being sad, Now that I'm dead I feel really bad. I always had to act so tough, For my family and friends it muct have been rough. Why couldn't have I listened to what they had said, Because if I would have I probably wouldn't be dead. Lauren |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WOW this is one very powerful message you have given us all here, and i do hope we all learn to see it. Thank you for sharing this important message to us all.~Amanda~ |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Indeed a good lesson to learn... one I leanred with my brother (he didn't die, but he almost did). Anyway..... don't really know what to say. Thx for posting this poem though... "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ This BETTER NOT happen to you grl! or i'll be pissed  Be smart..dont get yourself into stupid situations, aight? i'll talk to u later*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
very good poem... what was the inspiration for this poem (I am curious) Good Job! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
can we all say 'pain'? Thats a really sad poem, but a good message behind it... >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey... sad story, strong message. I hope we all learn something from your experiences. Thanks for sharing such a personal piece. -Allan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
this was sad....very sad.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Thanks for all the replies there is meaning behind this poem. Lauren |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Bump! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, you should bump this, more people should read it, it's great. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Bump |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
bump?it was really good. i dont know what to say about it. all i know is it reminds me of my life. great poem regina |
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