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Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13
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Fitchburg, Mass, Usa

0 posted 2001-01-14 11:57 PM


Dear daddy today I went to the hospital
cause I wasn't feeling to good
my legs were bugging me

Daddy when the EMT'S came
I thought of you when you went to the hospital
were you scared as scared as I was

Daddy what were you doing in my dream
watching me
to make sure I was doing okay

Daddy when they came to the house I screamed
Lucy was unhappy she was sad
cause I was leaving

Daddy when I got to the hospital
I was tired and in pain
the doctor came in said we'll give you some medds

Daddy soon the nurse gave me somes meds
I fell asleep and they took my blood
let me sleep and let me rest

Daddy then Miia and mom called
mom didn't like how I was in the hospital
I said mom I was in pain

Daddy she doesn't understand me
I was in pain crying
so I called 911

Daddy when I fell asleep
you came into my dream
you were worried about me

Daddy when I woke up again the pain came back
I screamed the nurse gave me some meds
I said thank you I feel asleep again

Daddy soon mom and Suvi came
mom said you are never staying home alone
she said you could of called your aunts

Daddy I didn't know their number
so I called 911 got some help
they helped me

Daddy soon mom took me home
I was so happy
got to go home

Daddy that night that you went into the hospital
that memorie stays with me always
your always with me

Love Always,
your angel Minna

~You never lose a friend, unless you make you lose a friend~


© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 381

1 posted 2001-01-15 12:03 PM


Minna, Please PLEASE never ever do that to me again please. I almost killed myself literally. I thought you were going to die and I havent stopped thinking about you. Hoping and praying that you are ok and everything will be fine. Please promise me you will never do that to me again please. I will not be able to handle it. I am very very happy you are ok but please dont do that again please i beg of you.
Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13
Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa
2 posted 2001-01-15 11:18 AM


I promise I won't, but after that I had spasms when my legs start to shake. I was in so much pain.
Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 381

3 posted 2001-01-15 11:35 AM


That is why you dont overdose on your medication and if you wouldnt have then your legs might have not done that. I know how it feel to have spasms in your legs i do believe me, but you cant scare me like that again. You have no idea what i had gone through. i made at least 5 long distance phone calls to see if you were alright. Plesae be more careful next time i dont want anything to happen to you or anyone here at passions.
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
4 posted 2001-01-15 01:15 PM


i liked the poem a lot... seems like theres more to the story but Im not gonna get into that.
keep writing

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2001-01-16 02:28 PM


Nice one here....just a friendly bump.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies
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Twilight Zone
6 posted 2001-01-17 01:32 PM


nice to see you in passions again Minna
Take Angel's advice
no more overdosing on medications, ok?


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Allan Riverwood
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7 posted 2001-01-17 01:40 PM


Hey Minna
I liked this poem a lot.  It's good that such an incident can inspire you this much.
Nice to know you are feeling better now.
-Allan

Lakewalker
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On the streets w/ people
8 posted 2001-01-18 04:26 PM


Great job of telling this Minna, glad to hear you're back home  < !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com


[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-18-2001).]

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