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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Last Week! We were great friends, For a moment of truth, But it was only for a very short moment, Then you left me for an...immature male. You spent all your time with...him, It's like I was being ignored. You could call it jealousy, You could call it what you like. He took you away from me, You've vanished from Earth, And all I have left of you, Is your...grave! That all happened last week, Today, I'm wondering, When he'll take the rest of you too. Maybe he'll take your grave from me, tomorrow. I thought that I would share this one with you all... I wrote this one about 5 years ago... It is about one of my best friends... I entered this one in a competition for something to do and it ended up a semi-finalist... I was proud of my efforts so I thought that I would share this one with you all and see what you all thought of it!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This is a wonderful poem. Just remember that no one can ever steal your memories. Try to hold on to the good ones. Best wishes, Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Indeed, no one can steal your memories...a powerful poem here, I'm glad you ended up as a semi finalist! That's great, good work!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow, THIS was a semi-finalist poem? AMAZING!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow.. congrats, you should be really proud of this great piece! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
That's a rude thing to say, Dopey Dope. We don't ever make cheeky remarks about your work. This poem was very well written and expressive, Mel. I'm glad that you hang onto your memories.< !signature--> Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-15-2001).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree with everyone, really great piece you have here! Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Thanks everyone... Melz!!< !signature--> P.S. Dopey I REALLY didn't appreciate your comment!!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... [This message has been edited by Melster (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Hey, congratulations on doing so well, the poem is good! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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