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Last Phone Call to Daddy
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Last Phone Call to Daddy |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I wrote this poem when I was 8 years old and I just thought I would share it with you all today. I know it is not all that wonderful or anything, but i wanted to share it anyway since it caught my eye when I was looking at things I wrote when I was young and because it is a true story. < !signature-->I wish to make a phone call and could it be today? My mommy needs my daddy in more then one way. She always cry’s and night and I don’t know why She tells me all the time that she wants to die. I think I need this phone call to so that I can say goodbye. You see it was only last week that my daddy died. So if you can reach heaven please do it for me. We really need to talk to him, I hope you do see. Please do not cry you can talk to him too. Just give me the number and I’ll give him to you. To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!! [This message has been edited by Angel in Flight (edited 01-14-2001).] |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Oh Angel I know exactly how you feel, I lost my dad when I was 2 years old and I often wish that i could make a phone call and simply say "HI" but I know it aint that easy... Good Luck, this is great!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow this was so sad........so so sad. Make my eyes water, seriously......geesh. Nice poem here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
anyone have a tissue...my mascaras running!! oops sorry nevermind that.. very sad and respectable poem good job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Really good poem. One of those that kinda just leaves a knot in your stomach. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm totally lost for words right now i just hope i can take your pain away I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Your words say so much in this one, nice job! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow... you wrote this at the age of eight? Very, very very nicely done! I loved it loads! Incredible... it's nice to go and pull up a poem from your past, isn't it? Nicely done! -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
THANK YOU!!! Melster~ Thank you for reminding me I am not alone. Dopey~ sorry about them watery eyes there didnt mean to do that to you. Jeremy~LoL @ You thanks for the laugh as well as the comment keoni~It does? Well, I wouldnt really know though because i wrote it i guess. Acrie~A loss of words sometimes can be the greatest reply of all. Thank you Lakewalker~ Thank you Allan~ Yes, I wrote this at the age of 7 or 8 not to sure which one though. And it is great to look at things you wrote when young. ALL~~~~ Everyone please post things from your childhood dont worry if you think it is not good enough it shouldnt be great you were young and if it is great then why dont you post it? I am sure we would all like to know where your wonderful talent of writting started. Sincerely Amanda To do anyting LESS then your BEST is to SACRIFICE the GIFT!!! |
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