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Loving Way
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Loving Way |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Loving Way: A pirate's heart A lover's mind The sorrow part It was time A poet's dream A man's own soul The dead light beam A star dust bowl A frown on face A life untold The finished chase A frightful mold A woeful walk A slow, dead day The hated talk The loving way  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i really liked this one. i have no clue what else to say. but u already know what i think ofyour stuff do to brad so...i got nothing to say except goood job and keep it up Dopey Dope. Regina |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good poem, but I agree that the point of it is tough to catch... It seems like it's more a general idea than one simple idea... And there seem to be multiple points scattered throughout. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
nice poem... though I am very throughly confused as to what it's about... anyway, nice. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
And he finally asks (after being on page 3 with 3 replies) can we have an explaination please?  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey thar Javi. Another poem about an ending? Hmmmmm...lemme ponder... I liked it much... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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