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~sugarpie313~
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0 posted 2001-01-13 08:08 PM


You make me laugh
You make me cry,
But the crying only happens
When you're not with me at night.


Your voice so sweet
Your touch is so gentle,
I just melt in your arms
And get all-sentimental.

I want to be with you
For as long as I can,
Because without you near
Is something I can't stand.

I want to scream to the world
That I think I'm in love with you,
That I have found the love of my life
And that is the absolute truth.

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*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed


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Melster
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since 2000-12-09
Posts 442
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1 posted 2001-01-13 08:16 PM


Hold on to him and don't let him go...  I hope that your happiness lasts forever and that things never change for you!!  Great poem...  

Melz!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

Morouxshi San
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since 2000-10-11
Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2001-01-13 08:19 PM


looks like you joined passions during the same time frame that i did, but i dont think ive ever read a poem by you.
this was very good, very very good. i absolutely loved it.

very well written and just straight to the point with some magical twists...  


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2001-01-13 08:40 PM


This is sweet. Love is rare, if you feel you have it, hold on tight. Forget all the people who tell you it's puppy love, cause even if it is, oh well, you two have each other now, so be happy!!
xoxo
Jenn


"A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ??


GirlsBestFriend
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since 2000-12-27
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4 posted 2001-01-13 08:41 PM


So perfect! u know I love your poetry so much, but this is lovely. see:
"I want to scream to the world
That I think I'm in love with you,".
made me think like ' oh God, please send me someone like that, please!!!' I mean so true and positive. all the good luck.

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

jeremydraul
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State of Despair
5 posted 2001-01-13 09:12 PM


good job...
if you screamed loud enuf I might hear you  

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2001-01-13 11:22 PM


This was nice.......very sweet poem.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-01-16 04:37 PM


"Your voice so sweet
Your touch is so gentle,
I just melt in your arms
And get all-sentimental."

I love your rhyme up there and that whole stanza.  This poem is really good


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Poet on Acid
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8 posted 2001-01-16 04:39 PM


awwww, that was so sweet and beautiful. It's good to read some uplifting poems. Your a great writer, keep it up.

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