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Ina
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since 2000-10-09
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Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2001-01-13 07:40 PM


I know a lot of ppl have the wrong idea about raves and ravers and that reallys makes me angry..grrr. this is what its like for alot of ravers, but this one is all about me!!lol

It all starts out softly
then it gets loud, very loud
my body swaying to my eternal
rythm, i sense the music
I see the green, pink, yellow
coloured glows

How I detest those who are to
violent and fake in their dancing
computer generated music sets the
beat, slow, fast and then slow again

I try not to draw attention to my body
but eyes always seem to scan my body while
i move, I can feel but can not see their eyes
for mine are closed

I do not need the drugs to help my senses
get in tune with the music or my feelings
I enjoy all the bodies dancing,
my pants so wide and my whit shirt
rides up my tanned stomach, where I jewel
rests sparkling
I see all those people with neclaces, pacifers
and eyes red, there is nothing in my way
I feel light and calm
I see through clear eyes, while I know some
friends see through drugged eyes
too bad for them!!!i laugh away all my troubles
while swaying to the music

Then I see a friend, my heart, I see Brad
coming to sway right next to me
in his wide jeans and whit t-shirt
Regina




[This message has been edited by Ina (edited 01-13-2001).]

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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-13 07:51 PM


Great poem Regina!  I like the mood you set during it.  You once again are very good at making poems that really make you feel like you are there.  I could see everything you described so nicely and perfectly.  
It's good that you promote clean fun without drug use.  Keep partying!
-Allan

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


Melster
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since 2000-12-09
Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia
2 posted 2001-01-13 07:54 PM


Brad seems to be the saviour of your troubles...  I hope that everything works out for you and that you can be happy and trouble free soon...  keep up the great work!!

Melz!!

P.S.  Remember that I am always here!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
3 posted 2001-01-13 09:05 PM


sounds like a cool atmospher you described..

great job....

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Morouxshi San
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since 2000-10-11
Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2001-01-13 09:12 PM


so, Ina, does this poem have any relation to my "about a raver"?

or other people in other circumstances?

very good poem, nevertheless.


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

GirlsBestFriend
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since 2000-12-27
Posts 71
Planet Earth
5 posted 2001-01-13 09:30 PM


good luck!

~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
6 posted 2001-01-13 11:28 PM


San, wasn't your poem about a river?

Anyway, Regi......the fact is......most ravers are druggies. Raves are the mecca for drug users.....believe me.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Poet on Acid
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 325
Florida, USA
7 posted 2001-01-14 01:30 PM


no drugs? thats no fun...oh wait...the moderaters...DRUGS ARE BAD BAD BAD. Anyways I'm glad you can enjoy yourself without chemical enhancers. Nice imagry too.

>¶Øʆ<

Ina
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
8 posted 2001-01-14 09:43 PM


thanks for all your replies.
raver s are good!and they arent all druggies!
Regina

Lakewalker
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9 posted 2001-01-17 03:50 PM


Gee Dopey, you said that to San before I could.  I'm with Allan on this one, I think you created the scene very well, great poem!< !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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[This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-17-2001).]

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