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GirlsBestFriend
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since 2000-12-27
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Planet Earth

0 posted 2001-01-13 05:07 PM


There was a day
When I was looking at stars
Wide Heven
Perfect Eyes
Sense of magic
Laying back and still trying..
To forget you
Act like if nothing's wrong
But why do I sing?
Does it make me strong??
Sayin' life is a flower
Haven't heard yer voice for long
Now...wind sounding like
music to ear
Sitting on soil
Drawin' circles randomly
Thinking of the reason
Why don't I feel my soul?
Needin' someone goodlistener
Then failed me tellin'
So the problem in me
Seems will never change
You felt the same?!
Just ignore it then!
Anyway know this:
Forever I'm your friend


~lotsa luv


"Isn't it funny how to the world you are nothing? But then to one person..you're the world"

© Copyright 2001 Mohammed Hammad - All Rights Reserved
Ski*Chick
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since 2001-01-13
Posts 141
Fitchburg, Mass, Usa
1 posted 2001-01-13 05:14 PM


I really liked your poem, keep writing them

Min  

Melster
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since 2000-12-09
Posts 442
Brisbane, Qld, Australia
2 posted 2001-01-13 08:03 PM


This is Brilliant...  what else can I say...  I am lost for words...  (Now there's a first!!!)

Melz!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

Child of the Stars
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since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI
3 posted 2001-01-13 08:09 PM


   I really liked this one. Super job
     ~Carly

inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog...

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14
Posts 375
Maine, USA
4 posted 2001-01-13 08:12 PM


you know i love your work! this is top-notch writing from ya!!  LOL  

~**Valerie**~

*...Remember your roots, my friend they're right down below, because heroes come and heroes go...* - Creed

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San Juan, Puerto Rico
5 posted 2001-01-13 11:06 PM


This was great. I felt like you were takin the reader from left to right in thoughts, yet at the same time keeping one foot in the middle the whole time. Very good poem.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07
Posts 381

6 posted 2001-01-14 12:18 PM


GBF, I cant read you whole poem but so far it sounds really wonderful i will come back later when i am not feeling so down and tell you what i think.
jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
7 posted 2001-01-14 12:20 PM


nice work GBF...
I enjoyed reading your words
keep writing us more treats

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
8 posted 2001-01-15 04:17 PM


This one is good, nice job

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
http://www.thehungersite.com

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Twilight Zone
9 posted 2001-01-21 03:47 PM


most enchanting read if i may say
simple poem, but written in complicated feelings
hope to see you share more of you work
thanks for the read

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR



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