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Angel in Flight
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0 posted 2001-01-13 12:50 PM


Candle in the night don’t desist guiding me now
dispense the light some way somehow.
The darkness is abounding with tears of anguish and remorse.
Assist me to descry my way, help me behold my course.
Candle in the night luster like you one time did
however please this time.....
shine from within.

© Copyright 2001 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
Poet on Acid
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1 posted 2001-01-13 12:55 PM


whoa, great work, this is very well writen and very discriptive too. keep writing and more importantly keep posting.

>¶Øʆ<

Allan Riverwood
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2 posted 2001-01-13 12:57 PM


Telling your guiding force to change its light source is risky.  Good luck with this.
Beautiful poem as always, Angel in Flight.
-Allan

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


Angel in Flight
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3 posted 2001-01-13 01:02 PM


Poet, thank you for your kind words

Allan, I know that asking to change its light source is very risky, but in all truth there is nothing left for me to lose.

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4 posted 2001-01-13 01:07 PM


Oh wow, I liked this poem TONS. very very very good poem. The whole thing made complete sense. Shine from within......very good ending......very good.
I think this is my Fav. from you.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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5 posted 2001-01-13 01:16 PM


Thanks Dopey i am happy you liked it so much.  
jeremydraul
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6 posted 2001-01-13 04:42 PM


As did I like it. I believe this is in my library now in case of some inspirational words. Great ending also!

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Melster
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7 posted 2001-01-13 07:24 PM


That was GREAT...  what more can I say...  keep it up...  

Melz!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

a_little_girl
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8 posted 2001-01-13 10:10 PM


I think that the candle that you've mentioned is like destiny. There is no one that can say what our destiny is going to be or how we'll get there, but we'll get there somehow. And how we'll find it is up to us because no two paths are the same.

**No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.**
~a_little_girl



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9 posted 2001-01-15 06:13 PM


I am just one big fan of your writing
Every poem i read of yours brings in this feeling of satisfaction in me....I love all of em

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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10 posted 2001-01-16 06:20 PM


Good job on this poem!!

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11 posted 2001-01-16 07:42 PM


Great poem. Very meaningful!!! Keep 'em coming.
xoxo
Jenn


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