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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2001-01-13 10:41 AM


Okay, here's the challange....
I don't usually write senryu's, and I kept wanting to incorporate nature.... hehehe
But I tried, here goes:

Dec. 21, '82

Almost Christmas Eve,
Baby for the holiday,
Celebration time.

You'd be amazed how many combined gifts I get....!

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer Parker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-01-13 10:49 AM


job well done jenn
must be nice to get all those gifts
i barely get any  


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2 posted 2001-01-13 11:26 AM


yes, nice job
you should consider writing more of these

~JDR

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3 posted 2001-01-13 11:43 AM


Nicely done... a late birthday, huh?  I can empathize on that point, always the youngest one in the class and such... but it DOES have its better points, doesn't it?
Great Senryu.  I agree that you should try more of these.

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4 posted 2001-01-13 12:52 PM


Nice one


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5 posted 2001-01-13 03:27 PM


Thanks everyone. No, by combined gifts, I meant, here's 1 for birthday and Christmas. You know? Plus, I get nothing for the rest of the year.
And, Allan, not a late birthday, because most of the kids in my grade were born in 1983, so I'm one of the older ones, actually!!
Thanks again.
xoxo
Jenn


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6 posted 2001-01-13 07:13 PM


Well done Jenn, my aunt's b'day is on Xmas day and she hates it...  so my mum always makes a special effort to make her have a good day...  mum buys her two presents and we make a cake for her and we take time out during xmas to forget about it and concentrate on her b'day!  She loves it cause no-one else does it for her and she hates it!!

Good poem!!

Melz!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

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7 posted 2001-01-13 08:17 PM


AHHH  JENN!!!!! we have the same birthday!!!!  
i know totally what you mean about getting combined gifts. we get jipped.
my parents always go out and do a lot of shopping then they split 75-25 for xmas and my bday. Well... i'm glad i finally found someone else who has the same bday as me! only i was born in 84  

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8 posted 2001-01-13 08:32 PM


Wow!! We have the same b-day? Coolness. First day of winter, 4 days before Christmas... no one ever remembers it's my day too! hehehe Neat!

Melz~ My uncle's is on Christmas, and he hates it too! It's really sucky sometimes...

xoxo
Jenn


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9 posted 2001-01-14 04:17 AM


well, at least you get presents..people conveniently forget my birthday...thats even sadder in my opinion...LOL
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10 posted 2001-01-14 11:00 PM


A baby for Christmas...what a wonderful gift!

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 01-14-2001).]

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11 posted 2001-01-16 07:07 PM


Nice job on your senryu!  

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