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Aphrodite
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0 posted 2001-01-13 12:45 PM


I love the way you're always around me
But I hate it when you lie
Why can't you just tell the truth?
Just for once give it a simple try

You act like you love me
But then again I know you don't
Can't you tell me what's on your mind?
That feeling that's inside...

Sometimes you can be right
Sometimes you can be wrong
But if you can tell me the truth
I know your soul is strong

Don't say you love me
If you don't really care
Don't pretend to have feeling
For a love that's not there

I don't know why I believe you
But to tell the truth..You won't
It's the way you make me feel loved
When really...You don't



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Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-01-13 12:50 PM


Hmm... Thought-provoking.  I like this particular piece, the last line makes me think about whether or not I have been in such a situation.
Thanks for the experience.  
-Allan

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


Melster
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2 posted 2001-01-13 01:29 AM


This is a great peice...  I know exactly how you feel, so if there is anything I can do just let me know...  email me if you want anything ok...  good luck, you are in a tough situation, I have just gotten through it, partially!!

Melz!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

jeremydraul
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3 posted 2001-01-13 11:54 AM


some people are good at painting their faces with disguises... i suggest you ask this person if he has desires to be a clown! hahaha  
Awesome poem here... keep it up

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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4 posted 2001-01-13 12:57 PM


NIce one here.......I hope things get better for you.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Morouxshi San
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5 posted 2001-01-13 10:09 PM


ive gotten into a lot of trouble too many times in this same topic, i dont know WHY i am replying but here it goes...

do you really want him to be honest always?
or do you only want him to swear your love towards you?
because if you really want him to be honest always youre in for a long ride that might end in a situation you dont want to be in.
you should be careful for what you wish for...

anyways, great poem.
  

san the stupid realist...
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San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...


[This message has been edited by Morouxshi San (edited 01-13-2001).]

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-16 04:20 PM


All of your second and forth lines rhyme except in the second stanza, that's just something that I noticed while reading this.   Nice job on the poem, post some more

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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7 posted 2001-02-15 09:24 PM


so many doubts...
i just hope he does mean what he says
thanks for the read

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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8 posted 2001-03-20 01:51 PM


Hey,

This is a great poem keep up the great work.

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

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9 posted 2001-03-20 01:57 PM


Wow, this is a strong poem.
It really hit home... very beautiful work. I hope I see more from you soon. Good job.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Crystalina123
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10 posted 2001-03-20 05:36 PM


I am in a similar situation with my boy friend. For the longest time, I just wanted him to be honest but when he was honest with me, I realized I really didn't want that at all. What I really wanted to hear was: "Of course I love you, love being with you and will always feel that way" -- that's not what he said and it caused alot of heartache for me. Be careful what you wish for because the truth may not be what you want to hear.

Anyway, good poem. It hit home.

Crystal

"I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life."
"You don't love her because she's beautiful. She's beautiful because you love

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11 posted 2001-03-24 11:15 AM


I really hope they start tellin you the truth, its not fair for you to be believing lies and for them to not care. Show them the poem or talk to them about it and maybe they'll realize what their doin to you. I hope things do get better tho...
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