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Two "Lovely" Senryus
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Two "Lovely" Senryus |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(wrote these while talking to Regina on ICQ. She's such a muse of love! ~_^) All that I desire is the sound of your sweet voice the smell of your hair When you look at me my heart flames with burning love melting all the snow (not too great, but not exactly crap! Regina INSISTED that I post them, because she said "If you wrote those for me, I would fall for you" ~_^ I wrote them each in about a second. Senryu works for me so easily.) [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-13-2001).] |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree it does work for you, it's very good. I especially like the second one. "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
Ah, poetry, voice of the romantic. Very nice poems. Heheh, my gf would melt if I wrote stuff like that.. wait, I do write things like that for her  heehee. anyway, very nice poems."Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Allan I am oh so very proud of you, you truly did it and wonderfully i might add. Please keep up the work it is much appreciated by us all. ~Amanda~ |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very beautiful and romantic! Senryus do seem to work well for you. Keep up the good work! < !signature-->*Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
your now a diagnosed senryuaholic nice job ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
For the record, Jer, I always was. I write Senryus more often than I brush my teeth. (don't take that the wrong way) |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Ok Allan darling, we need to have a chat... you really should be brushing your teeth more than writing these senryu's (however you spell it) ok just kidding!! You have done a great job, as always... keep it up!! And Regina is right, whoever they are about it a lucky girl!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Last time I heard........regina had a boyfriend named Brad......  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Don't misunderstand, DD. It's nothing big, and the poems weren't for her, she just helped me think of something. >_< Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I'm a little late here, but great job on these ones, I would trade love for this snow any day (not from you though allan, I prefer the ladies  )"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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