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He's Gone |
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lilpoet Member
since 2000-12-30
Posts 55Dallas,Tx |
My hands begin to shake I now know this isn't fake How can I possibly live on When my true love is gone Streams of tears roll down my face I'm lost without his embrace He was holding me just the other day And we were talking about how He would never go away He was my whole life And now he's gone with The stabb of one knife Please GOD, tell me this is a lie Please tell me he didn't die This has to be a nightmare One that I cannot bare We were soposed to live Our whole life together He always said "together forever" My whole world is spinning fast And all I want to do is Look at the past To those days alone in the park And cuddling up close in the dark He always called me an angel Well, now he's the one that's an angel I won't ever recover from this He's the one I will always miss There's so much pain Going through my heart We've never been this far apart This lonlieness is forever He was wrong on how Long we'd be together ~If I had a star for everytime you made me smile, I'd be holding the entire midnight sky in my hands~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
oh my... what a devastating experience! im sorry that this happen to you... i know words cant help but the poem really touched me and you developed it well best wishes! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Excellent poem. It had me near tears. So profound is the death of somebody close to us that we find ourselves questioning far more than we would have normally. As horrible and unnecessary this experience was, try to make the most of it. Sorrow is a powerful tool for writing. Use it accordingly. You just might impress yourself. Be sure to remember in healthy doses. Try to move on, but not forget your beloved. -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Sending you my deepest sympathies... This poem is so well written! It shows your sorrow, your fear, your shattered dreams and when you awake to reality. What a great storyline, except all too often it hurts too much to talk about it. I'm glad you can write about your sorrow, and I hope it helps you to ease the pain. Maybe you could try to think about the happy days to come in which you both will live among the clouds... Just a thought! ~BECKY |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Excellent poem, you have done a great job here... Your love will never forget you, he is always with you no matter where you go. You say that you will never move on... or something of that sort, don't you think that as the person who cared about you most, he would probably want you to be happy... just because you are happy doesn't mean that you have forgotten him, his memory will always burn stroing in your heart... He loves you as much as you love him and I can assure you that he wants you to be happy!! Good Luck and I hope that one day you can be happy again!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh lilpoet i'm so sorry to hear of such a situation that you have to go thru believe me, if i could take evryone's pain away from them i would you have my deepest sympathy i do disagree with you in some point though Now, he'll always be with you whether you know it or not He'll be around you protecting you from harm forever Stay strong lilpoet I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
The pain cuased by the death of a loved one can be unbearable... I can't claim to have lost a lover, but I have lost friends and family, and I know that it hurts. I can't really offer any advice, and i know that words will probably seem hallow, but with time the wounds will heal. And if you ever need anyone to talk to, I'm more than glad to listen, it's one of the things that I do best. So, if you ever feel the need my mail is dragonfang@skyfang.com ~~DF "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
ouch, I'm not going to try and offer soothing words, too many people try that and in a situation such as that nothing could pssoibly dull the pain. It was a very beautiful but extremely sadening poem... >¶Øʆ< |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow this one is a toughy one. Wonderful poem but Like poet......im not going to offer any advice...... However I do offer my sympathy.....Good luck and I surely hope things get better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Excellently written poem, I think the other's have said what I would have. "There's so much pain Going through my heart We've never been this far apart" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
Wow...this is SO sad... alas, true love can truely hurt. **No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.** ~a_little_girl |
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