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Death of a Nobody
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Death of a Nobody |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
well, after a long, unexplained absense and a thousand spelling errors later, i am back. i would explain but then i couldnt say its unexplained could i  some things have changed, somethings havent. yesterday i wrote the "hardest break-up" sessions, so those are the ones that i will be posting. if theyre not from the "hardest break-up" sessions ill tell you, ok? and now! without any further delay! a mediocre poem! -=Death of a Nobody=- Festivities in the air. Saturation of gases, and joy is the most wanted. Everyone is happy. Smiles are free. Could it be? they forgot about me... -San (the hardest break-up sessions) San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's good to see you back, my friend! Breaking up is difficult, and I'm looking forward to seeing your feelings portrayed in this "series". This is a good start. Sometimes we feel as if the happy world just passes us by while we sit around being depressed... that's true, in a way. Your true friends don't forget you, though. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I agree with Lovebug. Your true friends will always be by your side, all the rest don't matter. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey Felipe, You read the poem to me in the hallway before hell (math class), so you know what I think of the poem. This is me just trying to get an extra post so I can finally get to the top 30 top posters in passions rather than being #41 BYE!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I sure hope it's true that real friends are always there for you...but sometimes you are forgotten about...nicely written poem, I really enjoyed it! Welcome back to the boards!  *Krista Knutson* I'm a slow dying flower In a frost-killing hour The sweet turning sour and untouchable... -Natalie Merchant |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice to see your back very intriguing ending here i liked this one a lot what a friend dopey is eh? nice job bud ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Yo bud, this was a good one. Good to see your stuff again. You know I love it...and thanks for your reply to my poem. Means soo much.... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem is wierd and difficult to analyze... but i can see the general emotions within, if not the actual events. Great writing. Keep it up. Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I have never met you before - I don't think... Im Melz!! Nice to meet you... That is a great peice you have written and I look forward to reading more!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You did a really good job on this one, and I also am looking forward to more. And thanks for replying to my poems too "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
thanx for the replys everybody. and yeah theres going to be more, soon enough (i cant find my notebook). allan you kinda contradicted yourself there, but thats ok. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I do that sometimes. But I have NOT ONCE contradicted myself. >_<; -Allan |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
lol to Allan San good poem it was different and it was fun to try to analyze it. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why would someone feel this way? I keep asking myself that question In the end, I too am guilty of this sometimes wonderful read San keep posting I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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The Lost Supertone Member
since 2001-01-20
Posts 74Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada |
Man that's how my funeral will be, we'll have little kids doing the limbo over my grave. haha but serious, nice poem... and I think I acctually caught the main idea behind someone else's poem! GASP! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
And the world just keeps on turnin'.... It sux.... Anyway nice poem. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
why hello my friend. I have not yet met you as a result of my long absence. You will find that I have a lot to say. I am Jessica and if there is anything I can do to help you with this situation I would be glad to. I'm a good listener. And usually have really good advice too...if only sometimes I would take my own...ya know?  at any rate, this piece was so heartfelt and the length fit the message well. Just remember, you're never forgotten, just clouded every now and then. Best of luck. ~*~Jessica~*~*Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo or wings, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference* |
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