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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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Community of teardrops stirring in a pool fallen from the eyes of each savant and fool Chilling to the touch but at the core is warm the newest tears are icy cold the elder ones reform This pool is not for me the one who never cries the river of my tears runs warm and comes not from my eyes (wrote it in Psychology class... just a thought that was bothering me...) [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 01-11-2001).] |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
It's amazing what can come to you in class, isn't it?  I'm really sorry that you feel that you can't cry. Tears are the greatest relase, male or female. I hope that you let the tears flow freely from now on! Wonderful work! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
LoveBug has a point but some people dont cry.. Once in a while its alright to let them flow. I really liked this one.. I guess psychology must be boring? Well write one in math because I know theres a lot of time to spare there! nice job. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Magnificent as always Keep it up babe*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
pyscolgy, huh?now i get where u get all your ideas.....well it was great, had a nice flow to it |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
pyscolgy, huh?now i get where u get all your ideas.....well it was great, had a nice flow to it |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Allen! I loved the whole concept you portrayed in this touching piece, beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a nice one Allan, not as good as your others but hey......it's better than a lot of poems I read most of the time. Nice one here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You did a really good job on this one in my opinion, keep them coming. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
As usual you wrote wonderfully... I hope that you keep this standard up... it is always great reading your work!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very interesting poem Allan And I'm gonna have to agree with LuvyBuggy too But i do actually see some other thing to your thoughts of crying somewhere else Crying is actually from the heart...we all cry from the heart, and tears is only a biproduct of it...hmmm i might not even be making any sense no matter what, i think you are very talented adn once again you've amazed me with you writing keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WoW!! Now.. how could i have missed this one? I believe everyone should read this.. well by now you most likely already have, but If you didnt i say READ IT!! Very strong meaning, and Is well suited for your library. oh now to, Allan. Wonderful poem!!! I truthfully dont know how i ever missed it. This is one of my fav. from you. Awsome work!! ps. Close your eyes and write from your heart, and this is not said tword this poem so you know. |
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