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Our Love Was Never Meant To Be
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Our Love Was Never Meant To Be |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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~*The Love That Wasn't Meant To Be*~ You led me to believe you were the one for me Our relationship survived the shakes our hearts survived the aches As a pair we were so strong even when everything seemed to go wrong We'd forgotten what it was like to be without eachother, single and free We were driven by a fire that had been overshadowed by lust and desire We were so lost in each other our relationship we had begun to smother Too blind to notice our eyes out of focus Before it was ignited, our flame died face the truth, nowhere to hide We can't stay with each other destiny has our love saved for another Let's end this, but not regretfully for our love was never meant to be -=i dont like this one at all, but oh well its posted...and you can obviously tell what has happened from the poem.. ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This poem is great, DancinQueen. Once again you dazzle with a passionate work of love and loss... You made the right choice. Some things are just not meant to be. Do not regret your decision. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
sad ending but a true event of regrets i truely believe your writing is improving, as mine is plumetting. thanks for the share. ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh sweets  i guess dumbass has done it again i love the poem, but i don't want to reply to much cause it's gonna be bad things about dumbass hope you understand you're a sweet person and you deserve to be happy  i'll talk to you on aim aight  smile show me some teeth  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ok, I am kind of pissed off. Mainly because I think it's stupid for dancinqueen to let acire call her man a dumbass. Regardless of what the guy does, we must all respect. Maybe the guy has hurt her, but you only hear her side acire.....and if the guy does hurt her......fine....that's life. I've been hurt, you've been hurt, we've all been hurt, but besides any of that.....calling him a dumbass, or nicknaming him a dumbass shows your lack of respect for the guy, and dacinqueens feelings for him. Ugh....it just annoys me is all. Regardless of anything my "girlfriend" would do to me.....if anybody called her anything bad I'd rip their heart out. Respect acire...no matter what.....respect. Ps. nice poem, good luck with future things. Hope you find the right guy.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I agree with what you Jeremy said about your poems improving. I am more and more amazed each time. I hope too, that you do not regret anything. regret is one of the hardest emotions Best wishes, Jason ps I agree with what dopey said. Name calling is certainly not neccessary and in my opinion disrespectful... But that's just my opinion. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Allen~~ hey babe How are ya?? Thanks alot for all that advice...i wrote one of those Senryu's this morning. or whatever you called them, it didnt turn out that well, but hey it was my first shot at it. but thanks again, and i hope to hear from you soon!!Jeremy~~ hey babe!! I havent talked to you for such a long time. but thanks for always being so positive! means alot, you neeed to say hey to me next time you're on <3 yaacire~~ K well i'm gonna have to go with Dopey on this one..hes not a dumbass. I already told you once, that it wasnt all him and it was more toward the mutual side. Dopey's right, and i do remember you two arguing about his last time. no names, it doesnt help dopey~~hey babe, we need to start talking again. and you're sooo right about what you said. names dont help, and its not all him..although it makes me feel better to think that this was his doing, but as much as i want to think that...it was mutual. I tried to write this poem on kind of a happy note, but that never works out...but IM me sometime if u still have my name, k? and thanks for replying IsGona~~ hey there Thanks alot for replying. And i'm trying to improve, Allen's given me some things to work on and im trying! so im glad you guys are noticing ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
ok....my bad, but let's not cast any stone here ok? sorry sweets Dopes --- my bad....aight? You are right though, and I'm not gonna argue bout something I actually agree on Igona --- I respect your siding with Dopes Sweets --- I do have things to say but I don't wanna write it down here for all to see. I'll talk to you later bout it. Sorry Acire --- you dumbass I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this one a lot! The flow of it was great. I think your ending was really well done: "Let's end this, but not regretfully for our love was never meant to be" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey acire, no hard feelings right? You know your the man. I just protect everybody, even those I don't know. I'd do it for you pal. Thanks for the mature response. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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a_little_girl Member
since 2000-05-08
Posts 307San Alejandro, HI, USA |
I hope that you recover soon from you broken heart. That can take YEARS to heal. **No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.** ~a_little_girl |
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Ski*Chick Member
since 2001-01-13
Posts 141Fitchburg, Mass, Usa |
Hello I'm back, cause PrettyGirly didn't work out. Love isn't that easy to give up, I'm still sad what happened between this guy and I who now hates me but oh well Minna |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Noooooooo!!!! I can not believe this is happeneing!?!? Omg hun i am soooo sorry!! Maybe this was for the best?? Aww how are you feeling!?! We need to talk!! I am sooo sorry that this happened |
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