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a_little_girl
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0 posted 2001-01-09 12:37 PM


I saw a grown man cry,
just the other day,
seemed like nothing, not even candy,
could take his tears away.

I saw a grown man cry,
on a corner street.
I looked into his eyes,
with a friendly face I'd greet.

We didn't know each other,
we have never met before,
but that look on his face,
was imprinted on my memory forever more.

--it was a smile

© Copyright 2001 Karen McLeod - All Rights Reserved
Poet on Acid
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1 posted 2001-01-09 01:07 PM


awwww, a cute and cudly poem, nice touch with all the morbidity going around, nice ground breaker for the first post on this forum.
jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-09 02:55 PM


this was really good..
i loved the topic and title, it set a beautiful story...
i agree this is a wonderful first post for the forum!
~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 2001-01-09 05:04 PM


I love the topic  
yes, even grown men cry
simply wonderful
thanks for the read
keep em coming


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Angel
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4 posted 2001-01-09 08:52 PM


a_little_girl,

Great subject, Great Poem. Keep them coming  .

~Susie


"Do you love me because I am beautiful, or am I beautiful because you love me?"
~Cinderella



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5 posted 2001-01-09 09:28 PM


This was powerful. I really liked this poem. It radiates with positivity. I loved it. Wow.....nice one here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Will DeVore
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6 posted 2001-01-10 04:29 PM


Excellent poem here.  I have heard it said that a smile is worth more than any money in the world, and in a situation like this, I'd believe it.  There are so many people out there that could use some positive influences and examples in their lives, and this is a great influence for any person's life.

-= Will =-


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7 posted 2001-01-10 08:12 PM


Grown men do cry... it is something very precious to witness.  It represents the fragility of the human being.

Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy.


Baby Gansta
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8 posted 2001-01-10 09:23 PM


That poem made my day, as someone already said, a smile is worth more then money, and of course laughter is the best medicine, an excellent poem lil girl, look forward to seeing more of your work.
Bright_Eyes
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9 posted 2001-01-11 10:06 AM


I agree with all the rest, this is a wonderful way to start out Teen Poetry #4!  This is a great piece...sometimes we forget that even grown men do cry.  Keep up the good work lil girl!
Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-01-11 11:14 AM


You keep passing those smiles around, and you will go very, very far...and in writings like this, you might be a "star"...

well done!


Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
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Lakewalker
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11 posted 2001-01-11 05:10 PM


I love this, I didn't know what to expect when I started reading this and I really like what you wrote.  Wondeful job  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Melster
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12 posted 2001-01-12 03:54 AM


There is such beauty in tears...  As Allan said "seeing a grown man cry is something very precious to witness.  It represents the fragility of the human being."  This is true...  such truth you speak...  this is a beautiful piece, you ought to be VERY proud of this one!!

You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already...

a_little_girl
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13 posted 2001-01-12 10:37 AM


PA--thanks. You only get one chance to be the first post.
jd--its so rare that men show their emotions.
acire--sometimes I think that men are inhuman, with the way that they treat people.
Angel--thanks.
DD--I'm not really all that positive irl, but I try to be.
Will--expressions hold more power than words.
Allan--I hope that men'll learn to show their other "weak" feelings more often.
BE--thank you.
Sunshine--thank you
LW--Gracias (thanks)
Mel--perhaps it isn't money that makes one truely happy...


**No weapon will pierce my heart, no hand will be raised to harm me as long as I write.**
~a_little_girl



apsara
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14 posted 2001-01-13 05:33 AM


Wow this was just soooo great. Look forward to reading some more.

apsara

FoxXena
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15 posted 2001-06-15 08:15 PM


What can I say? This is really powerful.

Would you be known by everybody? Then you know nobody.
-Publilus Syrus

Julian L. Chester
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16 posted 2001-06-15 08:45 PM


i really admire this poem alot cause it really lets people know in some way that it is ok for a grown man cry and thats what has to put out there for all those who dont know that it is ok. very powerful poem
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17 posted 2001-06-16 02:06 AM


wow!...this poem has it all...beautiful yet sad and powerful as well the meaning and the ending ended it wonderfully...i loved this piece...awesome job ...hope to see more bye Karen

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18 posted 2001-06-16 03:59 PM


Very, VERY powerful words here.  A smile can sometimes make all the difference in the world to someone's day.  Very well written poem.  Thanks for sharing.

--Marie

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Anorexic Beauty, feather-weight perfection.  Anorexic Beauty, underweight goddess." --Pulp

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