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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2001-03-23 07:48 AM


When

When we have seeded our garden
And
Those flowers concede their lie.

When bouquets of us have fallen
And
Children’s children pass them by.

When even words are forgotten
And
Time has passed an eon’s vie

Newer seeds will seed the garden
And
Life will live once more as I.


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Cerenity
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1 posted 2001-03-23 08:37 AM


Hi Sy,

Beautifully written friend,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2001-03-23 08:44 AM


Hi Cerenity,
Thank you for the nice comment. *L*

Sunshine
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3 posted 2001-03-23 09:58 AM


a new flow
to the
way you
show
where your
mind flies
given
ties
that bring
us together
for one
more sing
when we
linger
longer
and become
a bit stronger

in all we
read from you....

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-03-23 10:00 AM


When we have seeded our garden
And
Those flowers concede their lie.

When bouquets of us have fallen
And
Children’s children pass them by.
===================

How can such a "simple rhyme" be so divine...
how can something stated so succinctly ... be of so much depth and wisdom ...
why do I ask why ...
the only answer I need know... is thy poets name is SY.

your so cool .. and me loves seeing ya playing with poetry..

"Those flowers concede their lie."

"When bouquets of us have fallen"

If one really reads those lines...and looks beneath the words....
then they will read the wisdom of a poets soul.

and hey sweet Sy....
Ron opened Forum 13 ... bring Randy and come play
winkiewinkie Stinky
me

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-03-24 01:43 PM


Sunshine,
Wonderful reply. *L*

JM,
It's too bad not all can read beneath the words. Winkiewinkie Stinky See ya on 13.

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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6 posted 2001-03-24 04:24 PM


Seymour - excellent writing.

BC

Sven
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7 posted 2001-03-24 05:06 PM


superb Sy. . .

I really like the last line. . . it's perfect. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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