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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 2001-03-21 08:04 PM



I have been to the edge
Of the abyss and returned
To tell about it

I have walked a million miles
With pain and sorrow
Weighing me down

I have seen the strong
Collapse under the pressure
Only to be left weak

I have bled from within
Engulfed in agony and despair
Praying to live another day

I have watched love
Slowly wither before my eyes
And die a slow torturous death

I have endured things in my life
That would have crushed
A weaker woman

I have given my all
Only to be told
It wasn’t good enough

I have tried to be someone
That I really wasn’t
Sacrificing my happiness

I have dreamed of a love
Which would complete my life
Leaving me contented

I have wished upon
A shooting star
Hoping against hope

I have failed at times
Which isn’t easy
For a perfectionist

I have succeeded at times
Looking for approval
But it wasn’t there

I have survived the past
To dream of a new future
With one who truly loves me

I have lived my life
In the shadows
But today I walk in the light

I have shouted some days
Until I lost my voice
Yet was never heard

I have cried so many tears
I wonder if there are any
Left to be shed

I have faced my fears
Amazing myself
With my strength

I have been to the edge
Of the abyss and returned
To tell about it


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2001-03-21 08:08 PM


and there have been others as well. . .

excellent LW. . . superb. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

SpitFire
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2 posted 2001-03-21 08:13 PM


~I have always told you about that strength missy. I knew it. And this is such an awesome write. Captivating. Pulls you right in - then hammers itself inside of you. Wow! "But today I walk in the light",...hooraaay you!!! *Peace.
Saunni
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3 posted 2001-03-21 08:33 PM


This... is beyond great! I enjoyed it!

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

Irish Rose
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4 posted 2001-03-21 10:05 PM


BRAVO, This poem is long overdue. You are one of the most honest, beautiful young women I've ever had the pleasure to know and love. Not only do you have class and style but you in the shadows, are shining more than the smallest star in the galaxy and do you know why.

Because you don't have to outshine anyone, you shine just where you are and the entire world will see what a wonderful woman you are.

I'm damn proud of you, Jennifer,

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Meadowmuse
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5 posted 2001-03-21 10:15 PM


A compelling tale of strength, endurance, and spirit. Very nice, Lone Wolf.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


EagleOne
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6 posted 2001-03-21 10:15 PM


A wonderful write my friend. You give hope that there is indeed a return path from that abyss! Take care!

"I've done all the dumb things"....Paul Kelly

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7 posted 2001-03-21 10:22 PM


Having been in that abyss for a long time (and a perfectionist too!), I know the darkness there, but now I also know the ligth when you get the heck out it! This was an awesome write, and one I am sure many can identify with. p.s. I hope you posted this in the dark section as well, as it would be a great ray of hope for some who peruse the Dark Poetry Section, great read!
Katherine Chandler
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8 posted 2001-03-22 04:23 PM


Jennifer, I am so proud of you and this poem should be plastered on every wall in my home to remind me that, yes, there is hope for a brighter tomorrow. This poem had a super message for those who are still in darkness. I was so very moved by this one.


Kate


Blessings always

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

walker
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since 2001-02-11
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Florida
9 posted 2001-03-22 05:06 PM


Painfully true, but very hopeful. Well expressed!

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
10 posted 2001-03-22 10:47 PM


Sven - Thank you, yes, many have been there. The lucky ones return.

SpitFire - I know you have said that many times. Thank you for your kind reply. Come on, walk with me!!!

Saunni - Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.

Kathleen - Thank you so much, sweetheart. You are a wonderful woman also. We'll both shine like they've never seen before!! From now on, I am just me. I know you are proud of me and that means an awful lot. I love you!! I am proud of you too!!

Meadowmuse - Thanks for stopping by. You have got it exactly.

EagleOne - Hey there, my friend!! There is a path. You just have to find it.

Mysteria - Thank you. It is a worn path indeed. I'll have to share it with the crowd in Dark. Maybe it will help someone. You never know!

Kate - AW, thanks!!!! Please plaster away!!!! I appreciate your words, they mean a lot.

walker - Yes, painful. Yet, hope is there for us all. Thank you!


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

[This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 03-22-2001).]

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