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The Rail Fence
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The Rail Fence |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
The Rail Fence If I had known that space and cedar Could hold as well as stone, or better, The things I might entrust to pasture, I would have saved myself some ache And taken off the afternoon To write a friend Or watch a brook. It's been some time since I last sat To just enjoy the look of water. I should do that. As for the other...... RMW |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions, this is excellent poetry, hope to read more in the future. Kathleen Blake |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I had known that space and cedar Could hold as well as stone, or better, The things I might entrust to pasture, I would have saved myself some ache ================= It's been some time since I last sat To just enjoy the look of water. ================= This is a cool write... written from a unique perspective with clever imagery, use of metaphor and turn of phrase. All who read this could perceive something different based on their own need of "fences" Welcome to Passions new poet ... so nice to meet you, I look forward to more of your interesting work. jm oh you speak to me in riddles |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Welcome to Passions! Man do I ever love this piece you've written here! Reminds me of the Lou Rawls song....'If I Coulda Woulda Shoulda' great write and I'll be looking forward to more from you.....some poems just hit me special and this one did! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Thank you for the welcome, and the kind words. Bob |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Check your e-mail for a special greeting! Karilea |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Wonderful writing. I'll echo those thoughts. Forgive me if I am wrong, but might I have seen you once upon a time at RLW's? "When people show you who they are, believe them" |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I admire the rhythmic reflection in your poem. Welcome and thanks for this. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
It will wait until later. . . (: Welcome. . . I really liked the simplicity of this one. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I like your words. Thank you for sharing them and welcome! *Peace. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is wonderful! Welcome to the family!  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hi Bob...welcome to our world...isnt it amazing what fences we build...and what we try to keep in...or out...ya just gotta remember all fences have gates somehwere...I like this |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Now this I like...simple and evocative. Welcome to the fam...   K |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Welcome to Passions! I think you'll find this a most enthusiastic place. Enjoyed this piece - great metaphor, that. Corinne |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Again, thank you all. Bob |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Corinne, I just found the little numbers up at the top right. Thank you for the welcome and kind words. Bob |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Bob, this is exactly what I'm hoping to have opportunity to do the first half of spring break when I go visit my daughter. I'll be away a few days, but I'll be looking forward to returning and seeing more of your poetry. It looks like you've already started quite a stir. I'm at the bottom of a pretty long line. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Virginia, Blush. Actually, I paid all of the above but you. Chuckle. You take care on your vacation. Bob |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Welcome to Passions! Great start with this poem. I like your style. Deb |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
 It's no use. In spite of my hurrying,I'm late in bidding you welcome. I do love lyrical, yet simple languages that express so much. You have accomplished in just a few lines what some poets never learn: show, don't tell. Superior bit writing, this. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Deb, Thank you for the welcome and comments. They are appreciated. Julian, YES!!! I'm now able to scroll down past 17. I do not understand this. Oh well. It was worth the wait, to be welcomed again. Thanks much. Bob |
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