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Separate States (with help from a PiP poet) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(Another Poet here - inspired - and assisted - I must express my gratitude) She waits to read this, She knows he’ll write it Like anonymously sent flowers he in his state, she in hers He is no Astair, Certainly no Chippendale But no fantasy No dream Captures him More totally – Than the two of them Wrapped in each other Dancing the night away Alone on the dance floor As the band grows more weary As they grow more charged He watches As she is no Rodgers But his gaze Allows her to Glide on his dreams And shift in waves Of transparent silk There, in his arms Wrapped softly In his mind A total movie cliché From hundreds of oldies Where the background fades Eyes become watery Gazes saying ‘This is real We’ll wake to it’s certainty’ Her back supple Beneath his hand His shoulder strong Under hers With no drink He is intoxicated By her scent His closeness His look Have destroyed her will To resist or delay Had she had any She remembered she’d worn A hooded red cape- A ‘Red riding hood’ Homeward bound He recalled the words Of the big bad Wolf The first duty of love is to listen. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
You make me swoon! You are so awesome!! This is fantastic  SEA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know, my Mom and Dad often danced across the living room floor, with little to guide them but the sound of R&H or better yet, Dad's humming... so if you don't mind, I'm going to borrow this little tidbit and tribute it to my folks....they would have liked this very much, very much indeed.... a wonderful read, Mr. Yeats....thank you and your friend for sharing such a delight.... |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
This is just beautiful! I love it! I've got to keep this one!! Great work by you and your friend!! sp  to be with you... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wilfred!!! I love this. May we put in in our 'musical' newsletter when it comes out? Please!!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What strikes me most about your work, Wilfred (or at least what poems I have read here at Passions) is the interesting combination of poetic tones, both modern and quaint. This is nice. Thanks for it. (o: Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--The dance of your poetry flows across my mind like silk...this is sweet and softly sensual...enjoyed muchly. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You know exactly how this makes me feel... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ This is wonderful expression of the heart. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She waits to read this, She knows he’ll write it Like anonymously sent flowers he in his state, she in hers He is no Astair, Certainly no Chippendale But no fantasy No dream Captures him More totally – Than the two of them Wrapped in each other Dancing the night away Alone on the dance floor As the band grows more weary As they grow more charged ====================== With no drink He is intoxicated By her scent His closeness His look Have destroyed her will To resist or delay Had she had any ========================= youre conducting poetic heat here poet sir... very cool write Wil ... the intensity of the dance is defined... very well done with your signature style and grace. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... and like the title... from the physical separation in the beginning to the distance a couple involved in each other put between themselves and the rest of the world. *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Back to the top.......... |
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