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Martie
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0 posted 2001-03-16 05:40 PM



Digging up the Truth (a rewrite)

From the ashes of the past, the breeze
has blown around,
and unearthed a smoldering shadow that was locked
within the ground.

His life had been covered with a casual
colored hood,
until the burning look back, when the hurt
he understood.

He wrote a letter to her, of love
that’s lasting still,
said he knew the pain he’d caused her,
all the years she took to heal.

He shouldered all the blaming, with his letter
told her true
that his life had come full circle, his words were,
I love you.

Liquor had been his mistress, she slept with him
each night,
curled softly, liquid charm had eased
life’s bitter bite.

The time with their three kids was lost
within a hazy beam
from the bottle that lay beside him, for the need
he’d sold his dream.

Now, years and time have trickled, poor health
opened his eyes,
he sees what he was lacking with
his drunken life of lies.

The first time she’d believed him
in all the years they’d had
was the day she read the letter telling tears
that he had bled.

She could not say she hates him,
no, this she never could,
she saw his bitter spirit and she thought
she understood.

The hope she felt in reading what
so many years concealed
was that this same man had learned from
the mistakes he now revealed.

Her respect that slowly died then
so many years before
was reborn in the telling, and opening
of truth’s door.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2001-03-16 05:43 PM


thank you for the mirror, the shoes, and the write....
VAS
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2 posted 2001-03-16 06:07 PM


Oh my, what a revelation has been had. I so want to know how it turns out for both. this is a powerful piece from a writer with a great struggle and decision to make. Powerful is almost an understatement.
Martie
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3 posted 2001-03-16 06:30 PM


Karilea--

VAS--This is something from my past, not my present...except for the letter and the changes in him...and we are friends, as we always will be.....thank you for your interest and concern.

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4 posted 2001-03-16 09:53 PM


Martie, many people, too hurt by what a bottle has done to a relationship, would not be able to see the truth and forgive....they should read this poem.
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5 posted 2001-03-16 10:18 PM


Excellent writing, Martie. It's a shame for all the lost years filled with pain, but it's wonderful that he was finally able to see the reality of the past.
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6 posted 2001-03-16 10:45 PM


His life had been covered with a casual
colored hood,
until the burning look back, when the hurt
he understood.

He wrote a letter to her, of love
that’s lasting still,
said he knew the pain he’d caused her,
all the years she took to heal.

He shouldered all the blaming, with his letter
told her true
that his life had come full circle, his words were,
I love you.
============================

The first time she’d believed him
in all the years they’d had
was the day she read the letter telling tears
that he had bled.

She could not say she hates him,
no, this she never could,
she saw his bitter spirit and she thought
she understood.

The hope she felt in reading what
so many years concealed
was that this same man had learned from
the mistakes he now revealed.

Her respect that slowly died then
so many years before
was reborn in the telling, and opening
of truth’s door.
==============
oh how I love when you rhyme divine...
and there are so many cool lines in this Martie..
and so many truths ...
excellent write of wisdom and reflections of
lessons learned in forgiveness.

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Wilfred Yeats
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7 posted 2001-03-16 11:50 PM


If ever they decide to give out ribbons here - red, blue snd gold - it is a 'given' that you will win many - I'd give this a gold for sure
Martie
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8 posted 2001-03-17 10:28 AM


Your right, Sharon, thank you.

Denise--yes, you are so right!

Janet--Forgivness is important if you want peace.

Bill--And you get the ribbon for nice replies...thank you, my friend.

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9 posted 2001-03-17 02:58 PM


The hope she felt in reading what
so many years concealed
was that this same man had learned from
the mistakes he now revealed.

Her respect that slowly died then
so many years before
was reborn in the telling, and opening
of truth’s door.

Incredible writing, Martie... and I think you speak a truth that applies whatever the "mistress" is... the respect only breathes again when the wrong is admitted.

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