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Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware

0 posted 2001-03-16 11:46 AM



You've often heard me say
"You'd look good to me
in a burlap sack"
This reply to
"Do I look alright"

So when you go out of your way
To make yourself attractive
Or just more beautiful
You may think
I don't appreciate
The wonder of you
That loves me

"I could be wearing burlap
Humpf"

I say let's light each other's eyes
At least once a day
We know the
Peck on the cheek
Is out
The conscious kiss
Is in

I'm willing
Nay I'll go out of my way
To bathe you with my eyes
Each chance I get
Guaranteed at least once a day
Let you know
Just how much I am grateful for
The whole you
Every inch
Every ounce
Every garment
Every stitch

By the same token
At least once a day
I'll abandon
The flannel shirt
Be sure I'm scrubbed
Shaven
Combed
Fresh
(The way you like fresh -grin)

I'd like to think
We won't
Get calluses
On our eyes

Let's be wonders
Again




The first duty of love is to listen.

~ Paul Tillich ~

© Copyright 2001 Wilfred Yeats - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-03-16 11:50 AM


O bathe away your sights on those you love dear....well done, Mr. Yeats....
Martie
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2 posted 2001-03-16 11:58 AM


When you look through love's eyes, there is always something beautiful to see. Wonderful poem, Bill.

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-16-2001).]

Paula Finn
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3 posted 2001-03-16 02:34 PM


I'd sure love to find a fella like you...we sometimes forget that little things do mean a lot...like an unexpected kiss or a compliment...this is nice Bill...
Corinne
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4 posted 2001-03-16 02:47 PM


Another beautiful & expressive piece!

corinne

Packratmike
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5 posted 2001-03-16 04:05 PM


This is excellent. I haven't been around here too long but of your poems that I have read, this is by far my favorite. Thank you.

Packratmike

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6 posted 2001-03-16 10:56 PM


hope you are well...this is a treasure bill....




Greeneyes~




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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown



Joyce Johnson
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7 posted 2001-03-16 11:06 PM


Delightful sentiments. Joyce
Janet Marie
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8 posted 2001-03-16 11:24 PM


I say let's light each other's eyes
At least once a day
We know the
Peck on the cheek
Is out
The conscious kiss
Is in

I'm willing
Nay I'll go out of my way
To bathe you with my eyes
Each chance I get
==================

By the same token
At least once a day
I'll abandon
The flannel shirt
Be sure I'm scrubbed
Shaven
Combed
Fresh
(The way you like fresh -grin)

I'd like to think
We won't
Get calluses
On our eyes

Let's be wonders
Again
============

OH YEAH..
Mr Yeats....I do so like the way your mind works...
and that sensual side of you..with that slight edge of naughty is always a treat
when it comes thru in your poetry...
very cool write

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Katherine Chandler
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since 2001-03-07
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9 posted 2001-03-16 11:28 PM


A delightful read, Mr Yeats. I might also add I really like your quote! Thanks, Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

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10 posted 2001-03-17 02:53 PM


I like this a lot... and I'll just bet she agrees to the deal you've offered! *G* Well done!
Wilfred Yeats
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11 posted 2001-03-18 10:20 AM


I love all you people - I only hope I have more time to spend here soon - to read and respond - Thanks so much
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