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Cerenity
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0 posted 2001-03-15 02:02 PM



May The Blind See

Take a walk with me let us see
Together Mother Natures bounty
Filling our hearts with glee
That which enriches ones life force
And your minds eye

It appears as if God’s fingers
Are wandering through
Mountains and valleys below
The fog billowy white coming
Endlessly forward roams freely

The sun hangs low in
Eastern sky colors bursting
As if painted by Gods
Appointed artist giving clouds
Spoiled cotton candy appearance

Feel the sun’s rays emanate
Upon your face
Does it not warm you
Deep inside
Where treasures are kept

Trees of every sort looking
Stressed heavily laden
With ripened fruit
Sway every so gently
To the calming breeze

Flowers of such magnitude
Lightly dew kissed
Brightly adorned as the rainbow
Smell the sweet perfume
Its almost drug inducing

Let’s touch the meadow grass
Feel its fullness
Colored with a green hue
That speaks of such strength
Seemingly endlessly bound

A fawn in all her splendor
Rambling through berry bushes
Sampling tender fruits
Then wondering off paths worn
From yesterdays gone by

Flying creatures of the heavens
Perched fine-tuning their plumage
Readying themselves for flight
Do you hear their beautiful melody
Does it not delight the heart

Off in the distance
Hear the rush of the waves
They are crashing against
Ragged rock masses
Jetting upward out of the seas

This is but a minute part of what
Mother Nature has to offer you
I hope that I’ve bestowed upon you
The beauty you dreamed of
May heart and soul be satisfied


By, Cerenity



"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)




[This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 03-15-2001).]

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Red-uni
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1 posted 2001-03-15 02:18 PM


Awesome. Wow..love this one!! You write very well, I enjoy reading your poems.
Red

Cerenity
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2 posted 2001-03-15 02:20 PM


Hi Red,

Thank you so much for your kind reply,

Hey I think there could be a better word than satisfied at the end what do you think?
(quenched) or???

Love, Cerenity


[This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 03-15-2001).]

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3 posted 2001-03-15 03:39 PM


So, so beautiful!! I like the fruit trees swaying in the breeze.....I can see it..... Challenge well met! SEA
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4 posted 2001-03-15 05:35 PM


Oh satisfied is just fine. For after reading a couple times. Then the closing my eyes to vision each verse. That i could see that the challenge was very sightful.



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sandgrain
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5 posted 2001-03-15 06:36 PM


All senses are brought to life in such a pleasing way through your imagery. Lovely piece!
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6 posted 2001-03-15 09:22 PM


Try it? You've mastered it! This was EXCELLENT! What beauty you've described with your wonderful imagery.

"May heart and soul be satisfied" It is!! It is!!

Thanks for joining the challenge!


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I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

I don't question YOUR existance - GOD


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7 posted 2001-03-15 10:57 PM


If it is for a challenge first of all good luck, and I enjoyed you poem very much. As for the ending, as you offered me food for my heart and soul, I like "fed" as the last word. Take care.
Cerenity
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8 posted 2001-03-15 11:33 PM


Hi
Sea, Bslicker, Sandgrain, Mysteria,

Thank you so very much for stopping by and for your kind replys,

WhtDove,

I am so glad you liked it, it was a fun one to do I love writing about Nature thank you so much for your kind reply,

Love to all, Cerenity

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