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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
What to Give in seeking beauty would I give more than a thousand cherries on the tree, than for one redwinged blackbird singing a song to me…. would I allow a rabbit to roam free knowing that it multiplies in sextuplets and more than for a coyotes' howl singing at my door castles are built but on what, servitude? or guilt; give me calm and then give me balm on the day of when… come again? come again and give it now believe in me, oh somehow learn to lean and learn to laugh and give me up for all my gaffs…. I love you… you will not learn to lean and I feel you are mean O I feel so guarded of mind and then wonder why you are not kind where did we go? we were one then we were none we go before then out the door I thought I knew the inside of you and now I know I'm forevermore… What to give? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
castles are built but on what, servitude? or guilt; give me calm and then give me balm on the day of when… come again? come again and give it now believe in me, oh somehow learn to lean and learn to laugh and give me up for all my gaffs…. I love you… you will not learn to lean and I feel you are mean O I feel so guarded of mind and then wonder why you are not kind where did we go? we were one then we were none we go before then out the door I thought I knew the inside of you and now I know I'm forevermore… What to give? ================== some just cant lean or take that gift from others ... its hard to love and comfort when they are so closed off ... thats what I read in this. hugs Lady ... (the castle metaphor and verse was perfect poetry) Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
JanetMarie, thank you for the "perfect".... and yes, I think your interpretation is on target. Bless you for reading. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Lady in White, I loved the imagery you built up in this and the way you told your story, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
All this you are willing to give and give up. But i get the message of a one sided giving.. Liked this very much.  Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Thank you Cerenity - I have read your works, and your quill goes overtime as well... Bernie...once I thought I had to be older before I could write....I see many fine YOUNG poets here who have an insight I wish I could have....so you and I Sir, we must go through the angst, and then we shall be able to poet along, don't you agree? Thank you for reading.... |
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