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catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2001-03-14 05:19 PM

My love, my dream of perfect bliss
so close to real, yet still amiss.
Your touch could set the world on fire
or simply kill me with desire.

Though on and on you turn away
still in my soul, the dream shall stay.
No truth was told, I'm left alone
I did no wrong, yet still atone.

My unknown errors of the heart
somehow I feel so pulled apart.
You only disassociate
though you and I were born of fate.

Tomorrow will your arms hold me?
Or shall you stay too blind to see?

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

1 posted 2001-03-14 05:37 PM

perfect!!!!!!

perfect!!!

in structure, imagery, rhyme, rhythm, and emoton...

a perfect poem.....

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-03-14 07:33 PM

wonderful Sandra. . .

I love this one. . . I love everything about it. . .the images, the words. . . everything. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-03-14 09:17 PM

I like this very much. I am addicted to rhyme and rhythm and this has both to the nth degree. Joyce

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-03-14 09:27 PM

born of fate

All love is, just fate isn't always kind.
Read, enjoyed, thank you much...though sadly.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-03-14 09:37 PM

Cat....

well done....

Blackdrake
Member

since 1999-07-23

Posts 83
Depends on the day :)

6 posted 2001-03-14 11:15 PM

Intreauging .

Mysterious is the shadow, walking down the path of light. ~~ ¥ ~~

Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

7 posted 2001-03-14 11:18 PM

Very nice... wonderful poetry.

CocoBaci
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

8 posted 2001-03-15 01:25 PM

Cat... Doreen nailed it 4me2 (I agree with her this poem is perfect)...

Excellent writing sweetie

~coco~

athena4
Senior Member

since 2000-12-10

Posts 622

9 posted 2001-03-15 05:39 PM

Sandra,
Beautiful! Such vivid echanting images depicting love and fate. And as we are painfully aware of, they go hand in hand.
Love, Elise

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

10 posted 2001-03-15 06:33 PM

Well done, lovely!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

11 posted 2001-03-16 10:28 PM

This is a fine poem.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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