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ATelamon
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0 posted 2001-03-14 05:00 PM


Pause to wonder please
footprints of time
wondering which leads
to twilight which to sunset

I am SilenceCravingSound
to listen to truly hear
the all within the one
the one in all as understanding

EveryLeaf on EveryTree
in simulatenous awareness
life the forest sings I stare
at the SoManyInstrumented score

LifesMusic conducts us
keepers guardians of the timeless
caught in a moment frozen in mid-cue
pondering twilights dawn

the downbeat awaits the sparkle
of stars and you as I rise
wondering at those footprints
I place my own within raise the baton

The night in thunder begins
the overture tumbling about me
drenched in sound upon sound I
breathe the crescendo exhaling life

I am within and without
nowhere and every place
in this the very heart
of the LifeSong I pause to wonder


" I can lie to my mirror only so long as it chooses to listen to me, and look me in the eye."

[This message has been edited by ATelamon (edited 03-14-2001).]

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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2001-03-14 05:05 PM


ATelamon,
Some interesting thoughts, enjoyed the read.

Voiceless
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since 2001-02-19
Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind
2 posted 2001-03-14 05:12 PM


A pleasure to read your thoughts!
Well done


~*Peachy Be*~

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
3 posted 2001-03-14 05:35 PM


"I am SilenceCravingSound"

and

"I am within and without
nowhere and every place
in this the very heart
of the LifeSong I pause to wonder"

my favorite lines... lyrical, spirtual and special.....

Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10
Posts 507

4 posted 2001-03-14 06:52 PM


The last stanza is outstanding. I applaud. Wonderful imagery. Nice one, Atelamon!

After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all.

JLR
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since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785

5 posted 2001-03-15 06:25 PM


to listen to truly hear
the all within the one...

the downbeat awaits the spell
of stars and you as I rise...

Thank you...I will pause now to wonder.

R.J.

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-03-15 06:35 PM


I liked this, I truly did.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

7 posted 2001-03-15 10:15 PM


the downbeat awaits the sparkle
of stars and you


This must surely be one of my favorites of your poems I have read. Very layered, very zenlike. Very nice. Thanks for it.

Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



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