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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Passion Mountain If this was a perfect world every woman would have a man and every boy would have a girl and we wouldn't have to spend our whole life searching for a perfect match. She would tap me on the shoulder and say "Say can I have a light?" And I would know right away she would be my perfect wife. And we would smoke each other til only embers remained and life would be so simple no one feeling naked or ashamed. One of these days I'll meet that woman to light my fire to fill my lonely heart full of passion and desire. And I'll gladly do the same for her in total absence of doubt and fear. Falling in love will be for certain and we'll dwell in our love castle on the top of Passion Mountain. Passion will provide the energy and love will be our power and we'll begin to lay our sorrow down in beautiful meadows full of flowers. Yes we will live on Passion Mountain where a billion shining stars can be found, a silky moon and good day sunshine shining brightly down. For it is amid these luscious valleys and meadows, mountains and streams we will find the way to fulfil our dreams in an endless lovers playground. And among these green forests and flowered meadows and streams if you listen to the rhythm of the falling rain softly coming down you will surely find the love and peace of which Passion Mountain abounds. Jameslee@March14,2001 [This message has been edited by JamesMichael (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
James, there is such an innocent aim and purity to your words here, poetic prose with an almost dreamlike quality, a universal appeal. Would that we could each discover ourselves in a lovestory like this. Thank you, James. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You have made this place so irresistable in it's beauty and love.....I can picture the peace and joy and completeness within your words...... This was a lovely way to start my morning, James......thank you for the trip to Passion Mountain!!  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, the poem itself and the theme were nice. If I were you, I'd have broken the lines up a bit more to help the flow. Just a suggestion.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
And we would smoke each other til only embers remained *whew* waht a line... ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thank you so much Claire, Sunny, Allan and Wynter for your kind comments...James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just let it all loose James. . . wow. . . I really liked this one. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'For it is amid these luscious valleys and meadows, mountains and streams we will find the way to fulfil our dreams in an endless lovers playground. And among these green forests and flowered meadows and streams if you listen to the rhythm of the falling rain softly coming down you will surely find the love and peace of which Passion Mountain abounds.' Very beautiful and passionate write, James!! I enjoyed this beauty!! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, James~ I'm with WynterGal~ on this one - 'And we would smoke each other til only embers remained' Yes ! Yes ! Yes ! You've stirred the embers with this one. Lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
James very enthralling, Passions mountain, Poem was so romantic. |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Beautiful, beautiful imagery. I loved it. So glad I caught it! After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
A very affectionate quality! I love the Passions Mountains idea. Off into dream land I go........ Wonderful writing!! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
James, I like this very much.....you know I'm cheering for you, hoping you find your love SEA |
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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
want to sit on passion mountain with you ....scribbling words .......hey james you got a light ? |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Sounds such a peaceful and lovely place to be. We should all have a Passions Mountain. Thanks, Red |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You wrote this so beautifully James...I like it lots |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
James you have climbed to the top of that passion mountain that exists in everyone's mind. The difference is you put the experience down in words and did a marvelous job of describing it I must say! Like old Walter Brennan used to say...." one of these days I'm gonna climb that mountain!!" "Yes we will live on Passion Mountain where a billion shining stars can be found, a silky moon and good day sunshine shining brightly down. For it is amid these luscious valleys and meadows, mountains and streams we will find the way to fulfil our dreams in an endless lovers playground. And among these green forests and flowered meadows and streams if you listen to the rhythm of the falling rain softly coming down you will surely find the love and peace of which Passion Mountain abounds." Great stuff my friend! I want to go there......I've just got to get out that love climbing gear once more and take a special friend with me!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Wynter and Marge found my favorite line before me. *S* But this is great... thanks for the trip... now where's the roadmap so I can return? LOL. I enjoyed immensely! |
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