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The Rainbow |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Outside my window a storm is approaching leaves float on the wind I sit by the window trying to translate the wild flowers dancing In my head some distant dream sits in silence waiting to be found The aroma of fresh coffee tickles my nose, I think but no words come to mind I listen to the rain fall sounds heavy, but peaceful in the room a lite music is playing It doesn’t help, no words come to mind, but I think The storm is letting up, a rainbow appears against the black sky I sit in awe of God's amazing creation words come to mind. *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
I like your poem. It has a dreamy quality to it, even though there is a storm outside. I always look for rainbows! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I really liked this one... the last line was a great way to end the poem.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, how many times I've been awestruck by the rainbows after the rain. This is a lovely poem, and gives me a feeling of peace and contentment.......thank you, Greeneyes, I needed just that this morning!!  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Me too! One of the most beautiful awesome sights a human can behold. I really like how you worked your way from the beginning to the conclusion....love the mood! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I'm constantly amazed by the dream-like quality of your writing. . . it shows in everything that you do. . . this is no exception. . . it's beautiful. . . ---------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ A lovely, lovely write ... 'In my head some distant dream sits in silence waiting to be found' Yes, that is how it happens ... ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very nice poem, you've written here...I like it! Nathan |
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