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Packratmike
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0 posted 2001-03-12 11:32 PM


The Lonely Wind

As we walked arm in arm
from the car to your door,
the cold wind bit at our backs
with a howling fury.
Stepping into your softly lit living room,
you dropped your keys and purse
on a magazine ladened coffee table
and turned to me.
Your cheeks were still glowing red
from the cold.
The light from a small tiffany lamp
across the room
delicately cast
an aura about your golden hair.
I put my hands on your hips
and we shared
a warming kiss.
As if to catch its breath,
the wind stopped hissing
through the pines
allowing me to thoroughly enjoy
the music of your gentle breathing.
Looking into your eyes
I nervously said,
"Let’s make love."
You quickly glanced down
at my shirt pocket and began
diligently picking
at an imaginary loose thread.
A corner
of your mouth
turned up
ever so slightly,
giving you
a shy
little girl look.
In the seemingly
endless
silence,
my heart sank
as you turned
and walked away from me.
The lonely wind
jealously
beat
at the door
while I watched you
pull the tassel to the lamp.


"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

© Copyright 2001 Mike Powers - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
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missouri
1 posted 2001-03-12 11:36 PM


Sigh...you make me long to be her
Just A Woman
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2 posted 2001-03-13 07:29 AM


This is exquisite. You have truly captured the essence of a woman. I applaud!

After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all.

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2001-03-17 11:08 AM


PackRatMike~
This is quite a delicately lovely piece of writing.

'As if to catch its breath,
the wind stopped hissing
through the pines
allowing me to thoroughly enjoy
the music of your gentle breathing.'

'as you turned
and walked away from me.
The lonely wind
jealously
beat
at the door'


WOWSER lines !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Sunshine
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4 posted 2001-03-17 11:29 AM


Your heart sank....only to leap again at the pull of a lamp's tassle....

oh well done!

Jellybean King
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Jelly, Bean
5 posted 2001-03-17 12:47 PM


I just loved the way this piece takes the reader through loops...out of the cold....into the warm room....a kiss...rejection...jubilation. Well written and executed!!

Jellybean King

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6 posted 2001-03-19 10:47 AM


Oooooohhh... I like this very much! *S* Well written!
Packratmike
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7 posted 2001-03-19 11:34 PM


Sometimes I wonder if I'm telling it the way I want it to be heard. BULLSEYE!!!

Thank you all for the nice comments.

Packratmike

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