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Exit Wound
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Exit Wound |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
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He entered my life and fragments of him Shattered into every part of me leaving nothing untouched Penetrating to the depths of my soul finding places in me I thought didn't exist couldn't exist Until him……………………… If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole ~SEA~ |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I have one of these exit wounds. You've put such feeling into these words and I could feel them profoundly. Great writing.  KateGenuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The exit wound will heal it just may take time...and time heals all things...this is an excellent write SEA I enjoyed the cadence in flow....ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i know exactly how you feel...... thank you for sharing this... well said |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEA~ Wonderfully done ! ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is fantastic...I loved the comparison here! and personally I am weary of being target practice...sigh...just wonderful, SEA. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole ================ WHEW... talk about impact of metaphor... Sea-girlie...this is a very cool poem... and hits hard in the emotion zones... excellent writing ... one of my new favs of yours.... and you already know I felt this one... very cool...very well conceived poem. Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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kismetkelsey Junior Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 32Canada |
Wow.A powerful title and a very poignant poem! Loved the way you painted this person's importance in your life.Well done! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . I really like this one SEA. . . it's very powerful and shows the depth of emotion. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a wonderful idea for a poem! I love it! The poem itself is very good....coming up with the idea is brilliant. You are good, SEA |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Princess Pout~ thank you very much Ethome~ thank you, he hasn't left yet, and I do all that I can to prevent it  Doreen~ you are awesome, thank you Marge~ glad you liked this Serenity~ lol @ target practice....that was good thank youJanet~ thank you so much for the wonderful compliment  Kismetkelsey~ it's about my husband, he is my everything thank you Sven~thank you very much! Balladeer~ thank you....your praise feels like a hug...you made me smile so big...thank you for that! ~SEA If I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
SEA this is wonderful!! I love the 'exit wound.' Oh the depth of love... |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thank you Dovey!! SEA |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Powerful lines at the end, SEA. Sometimes, we never know how strong we are until we have to be. Hope he doesn't leave!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very powerful writing SEA! Excellent expression ... I could feel the impact in this piece, great work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
He entered my life and fragments of him Shattered into every part of me leaving nothing untouched Penetrating to the depths of my soul finding places in me I thought didn't exist couldn't exist Until him……………………… If he ever leaves I know the exit wound will be so great there will be nothing or no one capable of healing me and making me once again whole" ~SEA~ Yes, and no one is going to leave you, you're beautiful! you ARE whole, I insist Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
This was so beautifully expressed...I loved the idea that a significant other can become so much a part of us...so much so, that to break apart from them would be painfull, if possible at all! Jellybean King |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know what you mean Sea...once you begin to give if the recipient leaves you find you have no one to share all those feelings and desires with and I have felt I need to begin to bring all those desires back to me...James |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
This one really hit a nerve (pardon the pun) *S*. I love the comparison to the gore of a wound, but then again, I like dark stuff. This was really cool SEA. |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Oh Sea, I really love this. A true love that you never want to leave. Great write. Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
He did make a good entrance, hopefully he'll acknowledges that. Great poem!  A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is wonderful, SEA... you've described well how important someone can be to us... so that even the contemplation of their absence is too much to bear. *S* Well done! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
and then you have to wonder what magic 'time' holds over us...so many of us here have these wounds...and yet time finds a way to heal...greatly expressed lady |
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