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Honeybee
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0 posted 2001-03-10 09:01 PM



Bleed

I want you to bleed upon the scales of justice
tipping the tarnished cups to bow down to me in defeat,
I want the spider to get caught in his own web
hung by the silk-spun threads of his own destruction,
for you, to be trapped in your own jar
with one air hole for false hope
as you slowly waste away from the suffocation of repent,
I want you to drown in my years of infested tears,
to lick my wounds, poisoned by the salt of remembrance
of your infliction of pain,
I want you to be thrust upon a bed of nails laced with barb wire
slashed by the sting of my brokeness,
for you, to be tied to a cage as rats knaw at your heart, bit by bit
as my walls close in on you
while you watch your life pass before your cold, black eyes,
even with all of this you cannot know of the torture my mind
and body has endured,
I want to breath without the fear that you are waiting to suck it from me,
I don't desire revenge
I want a vampire to show remorse,
to let the sunlight pierce his darkness,
when you bleed
only then will I be free

*By Melissa Honeybee*



© Copyright 2001 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 2001-03-10 09:09 PM


wow. . . the power of these words is like a hot iron applied to bare skin. . .

very powerful Melissa. . .

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Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-03-10 11:08 PM


I don't desire revenge
I want a vampire to show remorse,
to let the sunlight pierce his darkness,
when you bleed
only then will I be free
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Melis... now it is my turn to be speechless..
the raw power of this purge takes my words away...but leaves me with awe and respect for the way you write your soul in poetic blood on the page.
hugs to you sweetie ...
heal in your own light.
love ya
jm

We're living in a world full of illusion
Everything is so unreal
My mind is in a state of confusion
But I can't deny the way I feel
~Depeche Mode~

Butterflies_dont_cry
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Michigan
3 posted 2001-03-10 11:17 PM


Melissa...there just are not words for what
this evoked in me...this is amazingly
painful and yet sings of hope...yes I saw a
glimmer of that in this too...we who walk in
the pain always search for the light...and
how can you search without the hope that you
will find it....excellent writing~


Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
4 posted 2001-03-10 11:23 PM


Wow, you're one mean gal! This piece is indeed powerful, destructive, and fearsome with is good because, of the venom and outrage on display here and there ain't a better place you could find than to bare your soul, on this wonderful board of ours...great work!

Nathan

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
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Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2001-03-11 02:00 AM


mel-

wow!!! this was sooo intense and so
powerful--evoked in me all kinds of
feelings...and i too see the hope that
holly says...of course she said it a bit
more beautiful than i can--but i just
wanted to add, you are an amazing writer,
and everytime i read something by you
i am left in such awe at the talent. the
depth at which you write is truly
amazing my friend!

take care
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2001-03-11 04:18 AM


Intense and well said...James
Chelsea~
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Ontario, CANADA
7 posted 2001-03-11 01:44 PM


missy,

dear friend, you know that I
know who this is about.
Intensely written, and although so
sad, it's good to see you pouring
your emotions out so you can hopefully
heal and forgive

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2001-03-11 04:09 PM


Wow...Melissa? may I have your permission to write this in lipstick on the bathroom mirror?

But seriously---I KNOW the rage of this...and trust me, better to let it out than to keep it in. If this is from personal experience? I will pray for better days for you. HUGS.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
9 posted 2001-03-11 04:20 PM


Wow! Melissa! This is hotter than hell! I'd hate to read what you'd write if you did want revenge.......Powerful ! Intense! Thought provoking! The perfect poem to write to a vampire I'd say.........well done!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

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10 posted 2001-03-12 02:52 PM


Incredibly intense and very well written!!
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