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Raku Elemental
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gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
Raku Elemental in the heat of your hearth, the search for a perfect form, a perfect pot ……………… a pot is still pot though fired copper and lapis reduced to more until smoke marries air by sage and lemon grass ………………to hold rice or water or night debris flames thrust wet to cool or shatter along lines you laid …………………and a verse is still only a verse unless hidden protected from the prying breeze ………………to hold words or discarded metaphor until held in the hollow of your hand perfect imperfection …………………in your hunt to quench the fire * Raku is a way of firing pottery. * I have been experimenting with threaded or intertwined poems, likely not a new idea, but seldom seen. I am looking for a name so someday I may be a very minor footnote in poetry history. Currently I've settled on twining, but think there must be a better. Gary the dawg lurks [This message has been edited by gardawg (edited 03-10-2001).] |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
But I like this its very different to what I have already seen. Good work. Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
I applaud your experimentation The format of a poem is just that though. Perhaps you can devise a format as original as it is popular to use and read. I think that the Internet's capability of poetic interaction has done a great service to revivifying poetry as a living art. I hope you find your mark. Compliments AT "Beginning is one place, I've been before." J. Anderson |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~"reduced to more",...indeed! Enjoying this and the way that it was written. *Peace. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
until smoke marries air.... O...wow! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gary~ Two lovely pieces woven together - Very, very nicely done. I rather like the idea of Lattice as a name for your experimentation. The interwoven framework that holds the two structured pieces together ... appeals to me. I enjoyed this tremendously. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Gosh Ive missed you...and you know I love this... |
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gardawg Junior Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 34W of Seattle |
Marge, lattice might work. It also then leads to web and related variations. For now I'm going to stick to twining or threaded. I suspect someone will hit on something much more exotic than I ever could. Twining may not stay, simply because I am working on a piece with 3 threaded together. AT, form can help a work. I tend to be visual vice aural, so I look for shape often. Moon, spitfire, sunshine and Paula. Thanks loads. Gary |
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