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Just Thinking..... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Just Thinking sand shifts wind sifts skirts lift waves rift couples tiff give a gift of time neon's light moon's goodnight set your sights on black tights will your might not to light on her shade of lamp foggy damp muscles cramp lives revamp footfalls stamp along a ramp and fade away say a vow for somehow you allow in me, the now and endowed I avow the all of you give a gift of time on her and fade away the all of you |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wow...what images you paint with your thoughts! I hope when I grow up I too will be a poet just like you (still hope I am only 55  ) I thorougly enjoyed seeing your muse at work here. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
say a vow for somehow you allow in me, the now and endowed I avow the all of you give a gift of time on her and fade away the all of you Sunshine, I love this, beautiful Maree I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-10-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
These are vivid images, great job! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
At first I thought this a light piece. But the proof is in the words. That and every reader's misunderstanding of the same. Much within here dwells. Deserves more than a mere once reading. My compliments well crafted, and stoically minimalastic. AT "It is our reaction to an event, which determines its impact for good or bad in our life." "Beginning is one place, I've been before." J. Anderson |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for reading...and ATelamon?....exactly.....thank you.... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very sad Give the gift of all or nothing This is really good Karilea |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful thoughts, Sunshine. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
No such thing as "just" when they are your thoughts, Sunshine |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You kids are really kind to an old lady....making her smile all day long like this....thank you for your insightful reading.... |
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