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Game of Chance |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The line was drawn time and again and she not knowing the rules stepped out bravely only to be swept from the board ‘not your turn’ she was told and then again with different pieces and a different board she stepped out tentatively only to be swept from the board ‘still not your turn’ she waited there left of ‘go’ fearing to pass never collecting her due never buying a chance at a railroad or a house or life waiting for her turn to play [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-09-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and me? I should have collected my rent!  Love the metaphor here--and I say, let's go for the Monopoly!  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You can apply monopoly to so many things in life, so didn't want to go to deep with this (as I have a tendancy to do), so I will just say I loved it, and it brought back such wonderful memories of me playing with my Grmama, and scared I was going to loose the "dough", never mind buying the railroad! ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sharon, I liked this, how you used it to represent life, I have a few BIG things I am waiting for! wonderfully done, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Reminds me of a little story of real... I would play Monopoly or Parchesi, even as an adult and would never get past Go or out of Start..everyone just thought it fun to keep me back because I was the most emotional of all, in the family and group of friends. And when I would finally say I give up, in tears, they would call me a quitter. So I no longer enjoy games, playing any kind on a board...now I play them on the computer ...and if I lose, then I know it's fair. ~Wynter...sorry, your words brought back the feelings. "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Nice one Sharon! And free verse at that. Well done  <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very sad feeling I get from this I like the board game idea coupled with life  nicely done |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
PoetdeVine Excellent metaphor and expression with this. Well done. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ With such a strategic play, you've earned this !   ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all!! You know I don't like games like this..board games where a toss of the dice determines my fate. I prefer Scrabble or Trivial Pursuit. At least I have SOME say in how I play, by using my brains.... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I like the game analogy here, Sharon. I think sometimes though, you just have to get out there and take what you want!! Heck with that buying stuff!! LOL. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"never buying a chance at a railroad or a house or life" ~~ superb line! Sharon, please allow me to echo the others' praises about this interesting poem. Masterfully metaphorical. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know that waiting game all too well... it's amazing how injured a heart can be while on the sidelines, isn't it? *S* This is great, PDV... liked it much! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
perhaps it's time to get some new dice!! wonderful deVine. . . ----------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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