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Slow Moving Waterfall ( thank you VAS for that great phrase)
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Slow Moving Waterfall ( thank you VAS for that great phrase) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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I hear your voice gently call………….. like a slow moving waterfall Each drop……. a whisper of my name…………. each one different, yet sounding the same eternity passes………how can it move so slow it’s not really happening………somehow I know reality isn’t always real………… you cannot change the way you feel I don’t understand all that I dream Nor do I want to ………it would seem our soul’s are connected…….so shall it be even though you aren’t…………really here with me ~SEA~ If I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Well, SEA, I certainly like what you did with it. Now it makes me want to try one. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
It would be a great challenge phrase....I hope everyone tries it....I read that on your reply to Coco and WOW! It hit....such a great phrase....thank you so much!  SEA |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautiful SEA.....just beautiful. never tried this style, but well if I have more time, maybe I will try it than. excellent as always my friend. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Hi, I have not been posting here long, but I already know I love your poetry Red |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
like a slow moving waterfall Each drop……. a whisper of my name…………. each one different, yet sounding the same wonderful lines here SEA *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
SEA- Lovely thoughts penned...wonderful write. Poeminister "There is no remedy for love but to love more." --Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sea--The flow of this is lovely. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You've done it justice! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
SEA this is fantastic!! Great job with it! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
SEA, I love what you have done with this phrase. Great job!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A dream sequence in slow motion. An interesting portrayal of perception, surreal and yet, "so" real. Lovely, SEA. Thanks for it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Each drop……. a whisper of my name…………. each one different, yet sounding the same ================= I don’t understand all that I dream Nor do I want to ………it would seem our soul’s are connected…….so shall it be even though you aren’t…………really here with me =================== Oh I love the subtle haunted feel of this ... and the way it takes you along in its flow... very cool write girlie.. love the presentation... a way cool moment of inspire here great job Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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