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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-03-09 01:21 PM


He

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and she
heard it on
the breeze

it brought her
to her knees

and she said
“Lord Please….

Take my thanks
For this day

Take my words
Hear my pray

Take this pain
In me away

Lord, thank you, please”

And as she
Raised her eyes
To see

The world in
Grand and calm
Beauty

She heard again
A calm breeze on wind

And thanked
The Lord
For letting
Her in

For

He

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© Copyright 2001 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-09 01:26 PM


Outstanding! I truly loved this. The set up of it is stunning. Bravo!

To hold tomorrow we must first be willing to let go of yesterday.

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2 posted 2001-03-09 01:34 PM


and she
heard it on
the breeze

it brought her
to her knees

and she said
“Lord Please….

Take my thanks
For this day
================
*sigh*
dont ya just love when that happens *S*
excellent write Sun...
way cool presentation.
ya write well on your knees
sprial on *L*
jm


Some find subtlety in strangers
some find subtlety alone
Your eyes,you see everything
my eyes,I see its all together now
and I know.
~candlebox~

Paula Finn
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missouri
3 posted 2001-03-09 01:43 PM


Karilea...this is wonderful...simply wonderful
Katherine Chandler
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4 posted 2001-03-09 01:47 PM


Karilea, this was stunning. Nothing like an inspiring song to lift us to the heavens. I really felt so good as I read this. Major smiles to you, Kate


Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

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5 posted 2001-03-09 07:04 PM


I love "He spiraledasong"... such a beautiful thought.

~Wynter

shall save to place in treasured hold


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



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6 posted 2001-03-09 07:07 PM


this is such a gem..... love this! SEA

If I let you into my heart.....
will you promise to stay?
~Sue~

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7 posted 2001-03-09 07:28 PM


Karilea~
He does that - yes, He does !
Lovely, dear friend.
~*Marge*~


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8 posted 2001-03-09 07:33 PM


Beautiful...I like the spiral effect. Well done.

Poeminister

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9 posted 2001-03-09 07:39 PM


In the library with this one

Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning.


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10 posted 2001-03-09 07:40 PM


Outstanding! Thanks.
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11 posted 2001-03-09 08:55 PM


Beautifully done, Karilea! Lovely!
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12 posted 2001-03-09 09:24 PM


class and style all wrapped together. Nicely done, Sunshine
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13 posted 2001-03-09 09:34 PM


His door is always open
if we care to drop by for coffee
Beautiful poem Karilea

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14 posted 2001-03-09 11:46 PM


I love the formatting on this . . . it fits very well! Nice writing.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

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15 posted 2001-03-10 12:40 PM


Karilea~ This is a night for beautiful
poetry...and of course the night would not
be complete without a weave from your
quill..this is beautiful writing...it sings
of love my friend~

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16 posted 2001-03-10 06:21 AM


You....all of you....take my breath away....thank you!
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17 posted 2001-03-11 01:14 AM


Sometimes you can whisper a single note on your knees and it becomes a symphony! This was a mini masterpeace, great imagination, and you and your muse seem to be a pretty good friends! I loved it!

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

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18 posted 2001-03-11 07:54 AM


Mysteria, I do enjoy a good play on words, and I certainly appreciate "mini masterpeace...."

thank you!

Martie
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19 posted 2001-03-11 02:24 PM


Karilea--This is lovely!
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20 posted 2001-03-11 04:55 PM


Great format Karilea! This is so openly heartfelt...and I love the spiritual overtones...good show!!
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21 posted 2001-03-12 02:24 PM


if the forum ever makes possible 3-dimensional posting - you'll be the first to present it - this is beautiful
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22 posted 2001-03-12 03:19 PM


really wonderful i have no words to say more than what every one said
out standing


WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

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23 posted 2001-03-12 06:28 PM


I love this one. . . I really do. . .

you can spiral a song for us anytime. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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24 posted 2001-03-19 11:21 AM


Whoops - this one almost spiraled out of sight before I could thank ALL of you....
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25 posted 2001-03-21 11:26 AM


Kari dear heart, as always this is truly outstanding. Your ability and style are spiralling ever up. On wings of fire dear heart, fly high, utterly truly beautiful.

Take care love as always
Puck

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



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