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Reflected Love |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Reflected Love~ She asked me, "If you love him ... then how can you still let him go?" So I told her, "Sometimes love needs more ... and holding on too tight wont allow the heart to grow." "But I've seen the way you look at him, and I've seen the changes this love has made in you. How can you be sure that when you let go of him ... you wont be giving away too much of you like you always do?" So I tried to make her understand, sometimes we don't have a right to hold on to one another. There are times when love can hold us too close, and if a heart isn't free, in time the love will smother. Then I reminded her I learned a long time ago, that love doesn't always come with "happily ever after" endings. Sometimes the price of love is too high, the cost is more than the heart has saved away for rainy day spending. Still she protested, "How can you just let him go to her? What happened to your belief of things meant to be? All your rhymes and verses of poetry ... All your dreams of fate and destiny?" And as I smiled at my own reflections question, I said, "Don't you see?" ... "Because some where along the line ... I learned to love him ... more than I love me." Janet Marie  Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You are a better person and poet than I will ever be. And I will never say that again. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! What a piece. That last stanza the most important for sure. There are certainly some circumstances that this truly fits for. Might I copy and share it with someone I know? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Exactly what I always meant..." said the moth about the flame.  Loved this. HUGGIES twin. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I thought this was very beautiful Janet..I enjoyed it very much..Sue Suetang |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Wow Janny girl...this made a lump form in the back of my throat...the last line is killer and the way you have lead up to it in this poem...I can imagine sitting over two glasses of raspberry tea....and poptarts  chatting.... You've taught me through time that self sacrifice is really no sacrifice at all when we love someone...even if the decisions hurt us or even hurt them at the time...in the long run we know we are doing the right thing for them...loving the other more than ourselves adds another set of colors to the already beautiful wings that you are adorned with my sweet SS. The inspiration for this one shines in every line as does the love, heart and soul that it took to write it...love it when you weave baby..no one can touch your talent when you spin it from your heart. Love you girlie!! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well...I guess Butterflies said it all.. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Then I reminded her I learned a long time ago, that love doesn't always come with "happily ever after" endings. Sometimes the price of love is too high, the cost is more than the heart has saved away for rainy day spending. Still she protested, "How can you just let him go to her? What happened to your belief of things meant to be? All your rhymes and verses of poetry ... All your dreams of fate and destiny?"' Oh, JM...you're definitely a bigger person than I would be. Don't think I could ever do it...But, excellent, excellent work, as usual, m'friend! I love this!! Beautiful graphic, too, btw!!  sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? can I see my world without you in it? baby, not for a single minute... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Your heart is showing ...  "Because some where along the line ... I learned to love him ... more than I love me." And that is a wonderful piece of writing, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet.....there should be some kind of award for love this generous.....not to mention poetry this heart felt....you are SO amazing.....this one touches so deep....hit's on my heart dead center.....I just love this......(library)  SEAIf I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
*nods her head* yep.....this I understand all too well girl.....but ......... wow!!! the way you put it into words is exceptional |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, The truths that you mention are what real love is all about. And knowing that you know it, is why WE love you so much, that is Randy and me. Of course we are a little jealous but we will get over that. Your poem is delicious. Love ya Winkiewinkie Stinky. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
God JM, this was so very touching it brought tears to my eyes! This is absolutely beautiful, yet I find those words don't do justice to explain how this has touched my heart! ~hugs~ <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
That last stanza is a real heart ripper!!! I also loved the way you set this whole thing up...reflecting in a mirror...soul searching...self actualization. I suppose the "perfect" relationship has both partners loving the other more than they love themselves. With that in mind, your poem is heart wrenchingly sad, beautiful and inspiring...all at the same time. Jellybean King |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Janet--I think you have filled up on much wisdom of heart...and I'm so glad you have let some of it out for us to read. This reflection is outstanding! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
How many of us ever reach that point...of loving the other person more than ourselves...putting their needs above ours...you wrote this so perfectly...hugs girlie |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I didn't know where this was going... but I knew I was answering "How can I not?" to every question. So I wasn't surprised when I got to the end... you've written my heart too well before. *S* This is incredibly beautiful, JM... as is a love that truly puts the other person first and rejoices in that person's happiness even when they can only share from a distance. This touches me deeply... and is, of course, written with a pen that knows only perfection. *S* |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Janet Marie, as always, you have written from the heart. I think my light flyer has learned from a pro. To be able to give away what you most cherish and pass that lesson on to others is a wonderful gift. Thank you for opening my eyes and heart. Hugs, ME |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
janet- sorry late in responding--this is just exceptional and beautiful writing my friend!! just when i think i have read the best by you, i am proven wrong you write your heart and soul with this, and i echo all the others...you are wise dear sweet friend of mine...not only are you wise--you are selfless... to put one before ourself is what true love is all about...though most of us can't do it. i envy you, but then again i always have. hopefully someday i'll be 1/2 the woman and poet that you are! fly on sweet butterfly--you have earned those beautiful wings of yours and more! love ya amy "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Janet...I know you are strong enough to do this...it shows up in your beautiful poetry....take care. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, my sweet friend this is another wonder by you. Had me gripped to the screen every damn line. I love your heart. Baby you need a distraction. Parker |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Then I reminded her I learned a long time ago, that love doesn't always come with "happily ever after" endings. Sometimes the price of love is too high, the cost is more than the heart has saved away for rainy day spending." "And as I smiled at my own reflections question, I said, "Don't you see?" ... "Because some where along the line ... I learned to love him ... more than I love me."" ~*~ Beautiful depth and wisdom in this wonderful piece JM. I loved the "rainy day spending" line ... so very, very true my friend. Many hugs to you for this emotional and heartening read. Loved it! Best wishes gator-gal, /Kit |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Awwww this is sweet I love this Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Janet Marie....you blow me away.... |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
May I just say this is FANTASTIC! I love the way this read, two people talking. You've done well JM! I couldn't imagine letting the man I love go.... but if I had to, I would. ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully expressed, Janet. That is the truest kind of love, isn't it?! This one gave me chills when I read it, especially the last line. It really packs a punch! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ok girl, submit this to the main site!! Thousands more, even millions can enjoy this as much as we did!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My apologies for taking so long to come and say my thanks for these amazing replies ... theres been so much wonderful poetry in here...I cant stop reading JLR ... thank you SO very much for such a gracious and giving reply ... never sell your self short ... poetically or personally .. thank you again poet friend. Virginia ... thank you very much for your wonderful reply and yes of course you may share...thank you too for that honor. Sen me twin ... Exactly indeed ... (mothy minds think alike?) huggies back me sweet. Sue ... how nice to see your name here... thank you for the kind reply and again welcome to Passions. James ... thank you poet sir. Holly ... you bring the pop tarts..Ill bring the tea ...thank you me SS ...and if I was truely able to "teach" you anything it was only because I learned it first from a emerald butterfly ... but me thinks we all learned from each other in this past year...and the things we share help us to fly when we really need too .. love you too me girlie Wynter ... I guess she did .. thank you for stopping by.SP ...some times we dont have a choice in the matter .. thank you girlie .. for the "excellent" Margie ... thank you my sweet poet friend .. your reply was equally wonderful Sea-gator .. your reply is whats amazing and I thank you very much ... but before you start handing out that award...let me tell ya it is much harder to live out than to write about ...but I am trying and learning. I have been guilty many times of loving selfishly ...but sometimes we have to let go...to hold on ... otherwise the love dies lonely anyway. thank you for always seeing the best of me jellybeans ... thank you me girlie...and yes..I know that you know ...TY for the wow and the exceptional Sy-babes ... no need for you to be jealous me sweet...ya know me loves ya... But me thinks its good for Randy to be jealous..it will keep him on his dragon toes thank you for the delish reply me-winkie-stinkie Dovey ...trust me sweet poet when I tell you your words were more than enough and I thank you very much for your wonderful reply....I felt the sincerety in your words and was most touched by them TY JellyBean King ... thank you so very much for your wonderful reply and yes...that indeed would be the "perfect love" ... I think its what we all spend our lives looking for and its the thing poets write of most. Its so nice to see your name here and again.. welcome to passions. Martie .... as always..you only see the best of me and I love ya for that...like I told Sea...its much harder to live out and practice each day ... but I'm learning. thank you for the "outstanding" reply Paula ... thank you for the hugs girlie and for the sweet reply ... I'm trying to get there... (to that point.) TY southern-gal ... thank you sweet poet and yes...I knew you would relate to this... and I thank you for underdstanding and letting me know this one touched you. Sometimes we can love them more from a distance, as you said. ME ... thank you dear lady ... and I have learned much from her as well... and I thank you for letting my words help you see that side of us both. Amy girl ... trust me darlin....you already are ALL the woman & poet your ever gonna need to be ... you have proven that to me time and time again... thank you for always bringing sunshine to my day sweets Elizabeth .. thank you sweetie...and I know you are too...TY for such a kind reply. P-man ... well...I love you--loving this!!! thank you sweet tease for this very cool reply..ya made me laugh out me hot raspberry tea first thing this morn when I read this ... and hey baby...distract away (wear that cowboy hat) LOLKit-gator ... thank ya sweet poet...I wasnt sure about that line...so Im glad to know it worked for ya ... TY for such a wonderful reply. your a smile waiting to happen Moon Dust ... well thank you for letting me know Its so nice to see your name here.Sun ... thank you dear poetess friend...and ya know what? ... that breeze ... "blows" both ways Sheri .. hey you .. how great to see you here today...where you been girlie thank you for such a wonderful reply ... hope to see a post from ya soon. Denise ... thank you so much for your sincere reply ... your always so generous and sweet. Dovey.... thank you again(and for coming back) and I am honored you think this should be submitted. I will do that very soon. thank you everyone for such wonderful responses to this... love to all in poetry land jm |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Your beauty is showing again... I love the picture too. Deb |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
And as I smiled at my own reflections question, I said, "Don't you see?" ... "Because some where along the line ... I learned to love him ... more than I love me." Oh Janet, yes how true is this? so very true! beautiful writing m'dear I may know the word but not say it I may know the truth but not face it I may hear a sound a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-10-2001).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Can you believe that I am speechless?! Because somewhere along the line... I learned to love him...more than I love me" Just wow! I know this all too well. Your talent amazes me~ Take care, Melissa~ The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams ~Melissa P. Monette~ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
*Applauses*.... Excellent writing Janet....I loved this piece! Nathan |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
just stoping in to add this one to my library seeeestur. you know i really love this one and why. thanks for sharing your puter and poetry with me, say hi to all for me peace lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow. by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh that last line is sooooo gooood!! Your wonderful poet's heart is glowing in this one my dear poet pet....I've always wondered why I would want to hold on to someone who wanted to be free for whatever reason. This is a great story.....like you can do soooo well! I love it....... When our first love was blind and new we rambled under golden skies. We never needed others girl with our true hearts standing by. But for better or worse sometimes fails in the promise of those fairy tales. A wisp of smoke rises up in flight when a loving fire dies. So beautiful was our gracious time but worn out visions are never kind. Time runs over it's waterfalls where tired old hearts all disolve and mind weary goals fall off the scales outside the land of fairy tales. A wisp of smoke rises up in flight when a loving fire dies. Oh, these times they're changing fast and those old flames don't seem to last. But trapped inside there's another us shining somewhere behind the rust. So when we see old memories fade and that wisp of smoke blows away the soul moves on through the nights until a loving fire lights. Just something I wrote from a farther away perspective...as my time away from that love is longer than yours..... keep up the good work......you're VANtastic!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Deb ... thank you sweet poetess... and yes.. I love the dress on her in the pic DA ... hey girlie...whats up thank you and its so nice to see your name here.Melis .. thank you sweetie...your reply is amazing too Nate .. thank you kind poet sir .. I appreciate you stopping in Lil sis .. always glad to share with ya ... and thanks for always supporting me poetry love ya .. now go do those dinner dishes lolE-babes...thank you as always ya spoil me and I LOVE that verse you left me... thanks for sharing that "Oh, these times they're changing fast and those old flames don't seem to last. But trapped inside there's another us shining somewhere behind the rust. So when we see old memories fade and that wisp of smoke blows away the soul moves on through the nights until a loving fire lights." ========================== I love that verse!!! thank you all for the wonderful replies Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
oh JM I dont know how I missed this the first time....(when reading) this was Extraordinary.... but your work is just that.... be well....Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
"Because some where along the line ... I learned to love him ... more than I love me." -- Now there is a beautiful line...when we love someone more than we love ourselves, we can do whatever it takes to make the other person happy...you speak with such eloquence and wisdom, my dear friend. Marvelous piece of writing, peace to you JM. *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
"If you love him then how can you still let him go? So I told her, "Sometimes love needs more and holding on too tight wont allow the heart to grow." Janet, this is an exceptional write, it's one that brings tears to my eyes at same time tugs at the heartstrings upon reading each line... I thank you for this treasurable read... ~coco~ |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
How can you be sure that when you let go of him ... you wont be giving away too much of you like you always do?" These lines cancel the last. True Love is not something to change willy nilly. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
GE ... hey you nice to see you here..thank you for the "extraordinary" reply my poetess friend.Krista ... thank you sweetie... for the marvelous and eloquent compliments CoCo ... your always so good to me....thank you sweets Craig ... thank you poet sir for the read and your thoughts. Welcome to Passions thanks all jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
a perfect poem in content, verse, meter, and fluidity... lovely, my friend thank you for the link |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you for the compliments me queen of cadence and verse. so nice to see your name here me postess friend ((hugs)) me (and you KNOW your poetry dont stink girlie.) Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~JanetMarie,...your writing floods me with such emotion. Everytime. Eeeverytime. Thank you for sharing this. *Peace you. |
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