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Adieu Fair Knight
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Adieu Fair Knight |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
With gentle smile I bid you adieu fair knight, late of my heart You journey on alone it seems I remain here, as you depart The path you take will lead you to lands far from my ken if by chance, fate would choose I hope we may meet again Don’t ask me not to pine for you my heart will heed not that plea steeled against lost lover’s words those remain in my memory A glance over your shoulder a wave of your hand at the end a smile so sweet it breaks my heart as you ride off around the bend. And as the hours lengthen I know you won’t be riding home so I turn and walk away once again, all alone. [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 03-08-2001).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This aches with loss and sadness... you've penned another beauty, PDV!! *S* |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
Fairy Tale-like, sad and romantic. Nice flow, story line, emotions runneth over! Jellybean King |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Some day I shall grow in writing and learn to tell that big a tale with so little wording, wonderfully done, I so enjoyed that. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Simply devine writing...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
How many knights have I watched pass me by? smiles and hugs, sharon... This is beautiful. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Sad, sweet...yes, fairy tale fits...love. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all!! It was my mood today I guess....so many Knights gone, my daze is all that's left.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon...This poem is so ancient yet so new...for the dream of someone that stays is one that last through time. Beautifully done! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
perhaps it's not a Knight you need. . .  wonderful. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Sharon-- This is achingly sad, yet filled with a grace only you can write with. Wonderful writing my friend, what a treat it is to see your poetry around again!  *Krista Knutson* "Can't run fast enough Can't hide I can't fly I'm struggling with the limits of this ordinary life..." ~Tracy Chapman |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
The knight might have gone, but the muse surely returned! It's heart breaking. But well written <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Simply Sadly Beautiful... ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Sharon: You got your wish, I'm reading and replying somewhere other than Teen! I feel so out of place...  This piece was marvelous! The last stanza, and ending thought were excellent. Quite sad... The mood and tone were outstanding. This is my first library entry from a non-teen forum.  It's nice to see your work, finally. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
whoops... forgot to hit the library button.  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all for you kind words!! and Sven, if not a Knight than what? A King? No..I'm not the 'regal' sort. I'm a commoner through and through...perhaps a traveling poet? Someone who will let me tag along and listen? No..I'm not the type to tag along after any man. So what is left? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Um... A touring bus of poets?... A poetic commune in the country?... someplace everyone can write.. and write.. and write.. and write.. Nicely done, my friend..  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This cheered me up to read something so beautifully written!!! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Very nice writing as always, Devine. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
How about just a commoner deVine? There are plenty of those. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very nice...it is so hard for the heart to let go...very nicely penned |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I hope you weren't talking about me...*L* Just kidding. Liked the poem, as always. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sharon, this speaks for me as well, so much. The feeling of loss, so poignant here. And so well expressed. Sandra |
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