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Recognition
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Recognition |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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I search the windows of her soul for signs of recognition. It's sad to see the girl I knew in such abused condition. A flicker of a gentle smile just to see how she'll react. There's a sadness in her eyes guess I never noticed that. She doesn't seem to notice me she just quickly drops her eyes. Guess thats a trick she learned to use. 'How a beaten spirit hides. I listen for the laugh I know that was once so quick to come. Where's the quick wit and the humor she once shared with everyone? I watch sad eyes quickly searching never really feeling safe. Expecting the unexpected seeing shadows everyplace. As I slowly reach to touch her whispering soft so she can hear. I tell her that she's safe from him and gently touch the mirror. With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
the ending gave me chills.... i thought you were writing it for me... *sigh*... well written verse here, lucie, deserving of recognition!  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
ok, this really got to me, hold that little girl tight! (((hug))) Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
library.....forgot..this one goes...in Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I can't tell you how important it is to get your poem on sites of abuse...this was so very well executed. I have been the person in the mirror, so I know you did this with compassion and understanding, what a great poem. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lucie, I hope soon, when you look in the mirror, you'll see us standing behind you, holding out our poetic arms to you. You are safe now. And home.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"I listen for the laugh I know that was once so quick to come. Where's the quick wit and the humor she once shared with everyone?" It will come again, Lucie... for beneath the pain that bows your head is a resilience and determination. This poem is heartbreaking and I long for the day you'll roar back to life... I believe the wounds will heal and that day will come... until then, we're here in whatever capacity you need us. I'm not far from you now... email me if I can help. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
what a haunting ending....i do hope this isn't autobiographical but if it is, please feel free to vent out those negative feelings and i promise i will try to be a "reading eye" hugs |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wish I had the words to express how moved I am by this piece. Simply Incredible. It's obviously you, but it's me too. And I'm so sorry that it's about anyone at all. Hugs. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Lucie. I've been there and can just say that things will get better. It just takes some time. Perhaps the memories will never completely go away, but the intense pain and fear will subside. HUGS |
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