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the song. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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the song plays and I'm taken away every phrase is another memory every note is another piece of me I remember when the phrases used to be complete and the pieces of me fit in with the pieces of you we would dance by moonlight daring the dawn to come and when it did we would hide ourselves in night's final cloak fading away with the light the song ends and another one begins but for me there will never be another melody another song like you ---------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - very gently written my friend, and very touching to read. BC |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Sven, some songs are meant to end. But you never know, one note, just one note may get through. More hugs, ME |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
My goodness, I wish I had read this before I wrote and posted Sweet Memories for I think this is much, much better. I like this very much... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I always believed this to be true, nor another "moment" nor another "time" yes, it is true.....especially in reference to songs... Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
May you find a new tune and someone to hold. Dance in the moonlight and forget the past. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Nobody can tug the tears from my eyes like you can, Sven.  To be honest I find it a little unnerving! (couldn't find a smilie to echo that thought so I'll use this one - *sheepish smile*) "One out of four people in this country is mentally imbalanced. Think of your three closest friends - and if they seem okay, then you're the one." |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
You and your words do love such beautiful justice! I learn from you. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, this one is so tender Sven! It makes me picture like a summer romance or something..a holiday romance and then you're both forced to return to the real world but in the back of your mind you always remember "that one summer when.."..Oh my I'm rambling..Anyway, good stuff.  |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Exquisite, Sven! Have you ever heard a song called "The Song Remembers When"? I think it is a country song. Its beautiful! |
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CD Member
since 2001-01-27
Posts 101 |
Gives me a picture of rolling green hills - very gently written and absolutely peaceful!!!! Great write Sven, CD |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
AD dear heart I've been absent from my keyboard for a couple of days and return to find such beauty as makes my eyes ache with unshed tears. This is utterly gorgeous love, truly fabulous, although I would have almost guarenteed that this would be excellent because you wrote it. But it's even better than just excellent, it is a perfect jewel. (So did you miss me?) No I know you didn't even notice I wasn't here, except maybe it was a little quieter, I know!! Take care love as always Bubbles  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enoyed it a lot |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
loved these lines............ the song ends another one begins.......... reading my mind again are ya??????????? giggle helen |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely..but what do we do if we are tone deaf???? |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sven--This is very beautifully done...love is like a song....and the melody lingers in our memory, long after the song is played. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Bill, thank you my friend. . . glad that you enjoyed. . . ME, some songs are meant to end. . . but we still hear them from time to time. . . thank you. . . Lady in White, thank you. . . and your poem is equally as wonderful!! Kathleen, indeed. . . this is the way it is with songs. . .thank you. . . inot2B, thank you. . . but sometimes, I just can't forget the melody. . . dreamkeeper, please forgive my ability to draw such emotion from you. . . but thank you for reading, and for being honest. . . JLR, thank you. . . it is my honor to teach. . . Tennessee Angel, ramble on my friend!! Thank you for your words. . . and yes, it is like that. . .Temptress, yes. . . I know that song, it's beautiful. . . in fact, I even wrote a poem about it. . . it's back here somewhere. . . thank you. . . CD, thank you. . .that's a wonderful picture. . . Bubbles, indeed I did miss you love. . . thank you so much for reading, and you know that I always love to hear your thoughts!! vandana, thank you my friend!!! helen, sometimes, I think that it's you that are reading my mind!! Thank you. . . deVine, you get hearing aids!! And you clean the wax out of your ears. . . thank you. . . Martie, you hit it right on the head. . . some melodies last forever. . . thank you. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
I thought this poem was so touching and the words obviously came straight from the heart.....such a beautiful piece of writing. Suetang |
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KokoStewartKoomoa Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580Waikiki, Hawaii |
ver touching and eloquently expressed emotions. Beautiful write! aloha , KokoPassion,imagination and intellect running together... Poetry in motion~~~ Aloha with warmest regards, Koko |
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POETIC THUG Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 42HOUSTON TEXAS BABY |
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POETIC THUG Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 42HOUSTON TEXAS BABY |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"But for me there will be no melody, no song like you." And I suppose it will take a really special woman to make you believe in a new song...James |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sven, This saddens me to hear you sing in this way, I'm thinking of you friend, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
This sounds so sad, hope all is well. Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Touching but sad piece Sven. There is always different beat to a new song. (unless it's Brittney Spears, LOL) Ok,....couldn't help my self! Bad time to crack a joke.....Sorry I hope that the song I carry remains with me for all time! Good to read you again, I've not had time lately to do so! ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Sue, thank you. . . I'm glad that you enjoyed this. . . and welcome!! Koko, thank you my friend. . . Aloha!! Poetic Thug, I feel ya man!!! James, indeed it will. . . but you already knew that. . . thank you my friend. . . Cerenity, thank you my friend. . . it's nice to be thought of. . . Moon Dust, all is well my friend. . . thank you. . . Irie, lol. . . indeed there's always a new beat. . . and I'm glad that you've taken the time to read. . . I appreciate it. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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