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angelface Junior Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 40Savannah area, Georgia |
ok...this is a first attempt after a long time of writer's block, so be gentle...(but if you must, please give some criticism  )Evasive Procedures (penned while listening to the soundtrack of the Talented Mr. Ripley...it has some bearing on it) When you leave you take slumber And refuse to let it from beneath The veneer which encompasses your affection Yet leave behind the cold elusive fingers Who carry criticism and sad eyes to a new level And let them seep into the earth Until every creature merely hopes for dreams Lies awake sending thoughts to you to plead for mercy When you return you seek still more treasures And will gouge any guilt-ridden pressure point To induce enough illusion that you can take all But still leave some for the next visit I'd rather fail trying to do something spectacular than fail being conservative Ben Affleck [This message has been edited by angelface (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This is actually quite good It tends to approach a subject, from an angle that we don't see very often |
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