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HappyPretender
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0 posted 2001-03-06 09:27 AM


Blind Attempts

All I ever tried to do was love you
Completely and with all my heart
You took it all away
And tore me apart
Was I too blind to see
That was what you'd do
Or was I hypnotized, clueless
Just so in love with you.


This is pretty bad but its how I feel. This is the best way for me to get that out.
~*Rachael*~


© Copyright 2001 Rachael - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you
1 posted 2001-03-06 09:32 AM


Rachael~ Welcome!! Expressing what is in your heart, is always good....it's how we heal....I hope you keep writing, I look forward to reading more SEA
Irish Rose
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2 posted 2001-03-06 09:32 AM


There's nothing wrong with your words, they
are honest, and believe me, it's not easy being hypnotized, now in love yes, you can be.....keep writing, work it out, write it out, it's a tremendous outlet for release....

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2001-03-06 09:42 AM


No bad poetry can be written when it comes from the heart...I hope you will have an opportunity to visit our pages, read some inspirational and moving poetry, and in turn, share more with us.

Welcome!  Check your e-mail for a special message...


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ





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bslicker
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state of mind
4 posted 2001-03-06 11:07 PM


This is very good Rachael, sure there is others that can relate. I sure can..
Welcome to a family of friends,,, passions in poetry.
Bernie

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bsquirrel
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5 posted 2001-03-07 12:19 PM


A promising start. Welcome. (and don't listen to what they say: there's PLENTY of bad poetry out there This isn't it, though.

Mike

2dalimit
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6 posted 2001-03-07 07:10 AM


This is an excellent poem and PIP is a great place to vent (or express)your feelings. I'm sad cause you're sad. Welcome.
Melton

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7 posted 2001-03-07 12:05 PM


The truth and honesty in a poem
make the poem.
Well done...


~*Peachy Be*~

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
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8 posted 2001-03-07 12:10 PM


Heavens, no, it is not bad! It has excellent flow, a strong poignant point in a short, grabbing poem. Welcome! A good introduction to yourself, I do believe. Let us see more!
suthern
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9 posted 2001-03-07 04:28 PM


I think many of us can identify. *S* Welcome to Passions!
JCGF
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10 posted 2001-03-07 06:08 PM


Well said. Welcome to passions. This is the place to unload and you have done just that in a very nice way.

Hug's
Tammy

Lone Wolf
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11 posted 2001-03-07 07:16 PM


There is so much truth here. Love is blind, but in the end we always see. Nice outpouring of emotion.

Welcome to passions.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
12 posted 2001-03-08 04:07 PM


Nothing written from the heart is bad. You are a poet, as we are, and are welcome to share your work here.
Cerenity
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13 posted 2001-03-09 09:42 AM


Hi Rachael,

Firstly welcome to Passions and I hope you enjoy your stay, secondly no poetry is bad if it is spoken from the heart and this is a wonderful piece of poetry thank you so much for sharing.

Love, Cerenity


"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)



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