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Mirror, Mirror
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Mirror, Mirror |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Mirror, Mirror go ahead, look in the mirror don't see what you do for where you see only one there really should be two but when one is undercut the sweetest part is gone cast aside the raw disease and on one's own, get along you did what you had to do they said, "take care of you" you heeded the greatest need fled post-haste with God speed "mirror, mirror on the wall am I still fair, after all? might I stand on my own? even if I am all alone?" the questions you might ask take your sore heart to task feelings once left, unmasked life's blood which once was casked and in the mirror, mirror, on the wall see the light, may it glow in your heart, forever yours, forever bright |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, how truly breathtaking is this piece of yours. Utterly outstandingly totally wondeful writing love. I love it I truly do. Fabulous absolutely first class work You know this is really good don't you? Well, it really is. Take care love as always Puck   Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Sunshine, Talking to the mirror is an excellent way to come to terms with your situation. I enjoyed your thoughts. Melton |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
A most thoughtful bit of introspection - 'see two' and so many other powerful thoughts - Wow - 5*'s K |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Those mirrors say so much more than what they reflect, don't they. Your poem has poured out a clearer vision. |
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Embers_Before_God Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 101USA |
Truly wonderful words...thanks for sharing them...Embers |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
go ahead, look in the mirror don't see what you do for where you see only one there really should be two but when one is undercut the sweetest part is gone ==================== "mirror, mirror on the wall am I still fair, after all? might I stand on my own? even if I am all alone?" the questions you might ask take your sore heart to task ===================== and in the mirror, mirror, on the wall see the light, may it glow in your heart, forever yours, forever bright ================= some times we read a poem and it awes us because of structure, cadence, imagery, metaphor, sometimes its the message of the write sometimes it awes us because of what we see of ourselves in it... sometimes its all of the above... in this case, all I need to say is... I wish I had wrote this!!!! awesome indeed Sun. Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi ya, Kari - This is very thought-provoking. I hope it is not written from firsthand events of recent. It's good to be back. [This message has been edited by LngJhnAg (edited 03-06-2001).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
tends to read with a gentle but forlorn quality very nice  |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Always...the fairest. So beautifully 'reflective'. |
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angelface Junior Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 40Savannah area, Georgia |
s'beautiful, sun...reminds me of a wonderful day I had about 3 weeks ago that revealed some awesome things for me...thanks for this  af I'd rather fail trying to do something spectacular than fail being conservative Ben Affleck |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You folks are the greatest...thanks everyone for your wonderful comments...LJA...welcome home! |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Lovely! Especially the reflection of this piece! "Death marks the beginning, not the end. It is our journey to God." --Billy Graham |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
I also think it lovely. Nice writing. Nice image with the mirrow. Red |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sunshine will ever glow brightly. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sunshine--Wonderful reflections in word. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sunshine, I am in awe with this one, many a question have I asked and have found reality to be a hard pill to swallow when it stairs back at you especially when you don't like the truth, wonderful poetry here, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) [This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 03-08-2001).] |
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Martha Cowan Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 240Groves, Texas |
Very lovely, sweet lady! I just had to come visit your site and leave you behind some smiles! Excellent writing, as always! Smiles to you, Martha |
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