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Disgruntled
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since 2001-03-01
Posts 13


0 posted 2001-03-05 09:41 PM


**This was the first poem I ever wrote**


I love you,
But do you love me?
Our hearts,
So close,
Two feet away,
Or a mile into space?
Do you feel as I do,
And love how you feel,
Or is this a one-sided romance,
A love in vain,
Misguided and lost on the winding path to your heart,
Truth concealed from it by a lace thin veil,
Ruthlessly,
Disregarding the painful emotions searing your heart.
Am I being deceived by these mixed signals,
Hurting myself with pointless feeling?
Please help me,
Love me,
Assure me,
Tell me I'm not dreaming,
Bruising my cheek with a transparent kiss,
An emotionles hug,
Empty words pouring forth,
A fleeting memory,
Gone,
Without a moments notice,
But was it real,
This transient affection,
Did it really happen?
Am I wrong to doubt it,
Hurting you too?
Do we share this pain?
I'm sorry,
I'm so confused.
© Copyright 2001 Disgruntled - All Rights Reserved
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
1 posted 2001-03-05 10:15 PM


I can feel this...feel the longing and the confusion...
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
2 posted 2001-03-06 01:30 AM


powerful write! sadly, on some levels
i can relate to this...i hope that the
confusion settles some for you and wish
you clearer vision. and i hope that when
the dust settles you find out it wasn't
a one sided love--for those hurt worse
than anything!

take care.
lovely write.
amy

"A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words."


KokoStewartKoomoa
Senior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 580
Waikiki, Hawaii
3 posted 2001-03-06 01:40 AM


at one time or another we all feel this way...nice write to express it.... it doesn't get any easier to figure out either...sorry to say....Koko

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko



DreamLess
Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92

4 posted 2001-03-06 03:44 AM


wonderful words ..I became confused what should I write ??!!

mmm mm i 'm still wondering!!


WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

bslicker
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since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321
state of mind
5 posted 2001-03-06 07:35 AM


Wow, this is great. Put this in my library.

Bernie

Bernie Slicker

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2001-03-06 09:01 AM


When you wrote this you were well on your way to becoming addicted to this wonderful art form..this individualistic way to express yourself beyond the meaning of conventional conversation....and you sure started out very very well!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2001-03-06 09:02 AM


I'm so sorry....Welcome to Passions....you'll love it here...take care ethome
SEA
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with you
8 posted 2001-03-06 09:09 AM


I've definately felt this before.....great writing SEA
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