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dawn comes. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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don't tell me the dawn has come because I know that my arms won't let you go banish the light from my sight all I want to see is the dark brown of your night-filled eyes meeting my own in an understanding of the depth of our passion silence the sound of morning's first dove and let the beating of your tender heart be the only sound I hear and let my whispered I love you fill your ears and speak to your soul cool the first breeze of dawn and make it as soft as the touch of your hand to my cheek the touch of love the dawn has not come my love you silently speak and with a wave of your hand the darkness continues -------------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"with a wave of your hand the darkness continues..." well done, Sven...well done... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Fellow Lover of the Night, I surely appreciate every word here. Sandra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
May you experience many such wonderful nights my friend....this is very very good Sven! I love the atmosphere...you had me jealous there for a while. The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
let the love allow the night to last forever in your sight oh let the night forever live inside the love which you will give true belief of passioned time fills your words, completes your rhyme, love does not need ever die.... let the night forever sigh.....  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
AD dear heart, this is superb, truly outstanding. I love the feel of this one it brings all sorts of pictures to my head. Mmmmm very clear some of them are too Fabulous work love utterly wonderful and it really makes my thoughts sigh. Take care love as always Bubbles Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
You've captured the depths of the best kind of love. It is easy to write of love.......not always easy to describe this kind of love. Beautiful, Sven. Thank you for the kind welcome back!  "Success is going from failure to failure without losing enthusiasm." ~Winston Churchill~ |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
John, Very well done my friend. I love your work. Take Care, Laura |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh I love this.....if only it were that easy...course with a pair of black curtains...and maybe those masks they use to keep the puffiness out of your eyes....course that's not very romantic looking (rofg) and then you wouldn't be able to see her eyes...nope...that won't work...maybe just read your poem outloud and let its magic take the light nice work here |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
"Banish the light from my sight all I want to see.." Oh, Sven..I can hear the melody of this one! Hope you don't mind I've already put it to music in my head. I do so love when you write like this! |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sven, This touched me with sad but hopeful fingers. I loved it! *Jenn* |
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Brian Beaudry Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 57Northern Ontario Canada |
Beautiful and tender words of longing and devotion my friend!! You describe a love that many search their lives for and never find!! Thanks for sharing this poem with us. Brian |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
I love it!! Thanks for sharing. Red |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
the dawn has not come my love you silently speak and with a wave of your hand the darkness continues magical and beautiful words.....great writing Sven Packratmike [This message has been edited by Packratmike (edited 03-05-2001).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is such a dreamy piece...beautifully done |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you silently speak the darkness continues" enjoyed how you silently speak.....lovely sven, just lovely.....  Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself Without you I find myself Wanting to be lost again." -Unknown |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sven- and THIS is why i call you the King of Romance so beautiful this is...you have penned your heart in this one and what a wonderful view you share with all of us. take care m'friend... amy p.s...she must be one special lady "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sven, "signing" here, I have to agree with Aimster YOU are the KING,,, wonderfully penned, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Hey Sven, I really liked this. I really enjoyed all the lines in this one, especially the ending...very cool. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
and I love the beginning...... don't tell me the dawn has come because I know that my arms won't let you go ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you everyone. . . I'm glad that you all enjoyed this one. . . As always, your words mean a lot. . . and I appreciate every one of them!!!! --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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