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Red-uni
Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 192
Georgia, USA

0 posted 2001-03-04 09:42 PM

Take my hand softly,
see love in my eyes.
Gently caress me,
passionately lips meet,
touch is sensual.
Breath quickens,
then a knock.
Dream disappears,
now stark reality.
Until next time my lover,
hidden in the mist.

Red-uni © 03/01

Celeste
Senior Member

since 2000-11-11

Posts 597

1 posted 2001-03-04 10:53 PM

The distance between dreams and reality.......I have lately been contemplating this. You've expressed this beautifully in few words. Not easily done. Have really enjoyed your writing!

"Success is going from failure to failure without losing enthusiasm."

~Winston Churchill~

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

2 posted 2001-03-05 01:07 AM

Can relate to this...excellent write.

Poeminister

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

3 posted 2001-03-05 04:48 PM

Whew...such intensity in so few lines! I enjoyed this!

sp

do I believe we'd be better off apart?
can I see my world without you in it?
baby, not for a single minute...

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2001-03-05 04:52 PM

Well done! the scene is well painted with few words....welcome to Passions!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2001-03-06 03:12 AM

AH HA!

I KNEW it had to be here somewhere!

I enjoyed it!

Keep writing!

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

6 posted 2001-03-06 03:18 AM

I really like this poem.....great job!

sans38
Member

since 2001-03-03

Posts 117
Westland, Michigan

7 posted 2001-03-06 08:11 AM

Simply Beautiful! I loved it!!

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

8 posted 2001-03-06 08:18 AM

Red, Too bad it was only a dream, but, a good one.
Melton

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2001-03-06 08:47 AM

Very R&J....well done!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

10 posted 2001-03-06 10:20 AM

Yes, well done, hidden in the mist, I like that

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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