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Kethry
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Victoria Australia

0 posted 2001-03-03 11:19 AM


This poem was written to a tune going through my head. It's at times like this I wish I could use those wav thingys.




Here I am shining reflection of your light
Can you see me smiling, watching through the night?
At best, at rest,
Put me to the test,
I seek my brother sun, to pay him homage right

Here am I sulking, the tides rise my call
The thunderclouds responding, lest I ask their all
On wane, in pain,
Looking for the bane
Yet, seek my brother's gloaming to prevent my fall

Can you see me rising, encompassing dusk time?
Now that I am striving, the victory will be mine
This night so bright
Surrounded with starlight
Your sister moon is soaring, come join me in the climb

Look at me I'm shining, in fullness for this time
A rounded, dim reflection of my brother mine
But still, fulfill
My promise if you will
Brother sun I'm shining and everything is fine.





Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



© Copyright 2001 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2001-03-03 11:25 AM


Great to read your shining words my dear picnic partner. And you're celebrating it with some very well written poetry! How could life get much better than that you being the moon and shining in the light of your brother sun....I really loved the read!!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon
2 posted 2001-03-03 11:36 AM


Beautiful and an especially beautiful idea. It caused me to think how we are indeed supposed to be as moons reflecting the light of the true Son. Thank you for this thought, even if it may be awry from what you were intending...since I changed the spelling. The moon reflects, it does not shine of its own power.
Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
3 posted 2001-03-03 11:48 AM


ethome,
thank you so much. I guess you could call this a little too much whine or wane even.

VAS,
I did make the connection between a reflection of the sun (Son) thanks for pointing it out
be well
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Sven
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4 posted 2001-03-03 11:47 PM


shine on Sister Moon. . . and I'm hearing that song as well. . .

Brother Sun

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
5 posted 2001-03-04 02:24 AM


Brother Sun,
thank you. I'm so glad the song plays for us both.
Kethry


Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen.



Marsha
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6 posted 2001-03-05 05:20 PM


Kethry dear heart, the real moon may only be a pale reflection, beautiful, but a reflection nevertheless. You however Sister Moon shin so brightly the stars are sulking because they are dimmed, I love this one dear heart, utterly splendid, and did I say it was superb? Well, of course it is, always dear heart you shine so wonderfully, and this beams beautifully.
Absolutely excellent, now you know why i love these ones so much, they are just sooooooo magnificent
Take care love as always
Slushy


Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning



Dennis
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since 2001-02-19
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Indiana
7 posted 2001-03-05 07:29 PM


Oh yeah, I really liked this a lot. The picture and the entire poem

Dennis

Toerag
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Ala bam a
8 posted 2001-03-05 07:46 PM


Yanno? For a silly ***** you're pretty good....yanno?.....LOL
Toerag
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Ala bam a
9 posted 2001-03-05 07:48 PM


But....but....B.I.T.C.H. stands for "Being In Total Control of Herself?..."....So?
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