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Heaven's Bodies
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Heaven's Bodies |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Here, you’ve placed upon me The colors of the sea So backwards, I regress On the floor there is a dress The sun shed the sea Like a gown over me I lay, my ears are roaring The sun peaks through, adoring My turn to clothe the sun A new day has now begun The moon sits there so cold The sea is just as old And to the moon she must abide For he guides the ocean tide The sea, discarded gown The moon could never drown Neither offers, nor takes the dress And backwards, I regress In chaos, before the forming A sense of warmth, there is swarming And I was all of these and none The day of birth has now begun So many sins yet to confess And now may I progress Laying softly upon the beach With heaven’s bodies there to teach You and I in this new world Where chaos finds us hurled And from heaven we are clothed Now in union, now betrothed [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 03-03-2001).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Walt, utterly fabulous. Write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
W.O.W.~ Smiles and Sighs....tenderly woven and beautifully put! |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Imagery, blended with promise....lovely, very lovely.... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks guys big smiles |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Walt~ this is fantastic!!  SEAIf I let you into my heart..... will you promise to stay? ~Sue~ |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Your words are very well said. Regress, regress, then progress after confess. Que maravilloso! Your uses of the sun, sea, moon, gown, etc. allow for a subdued approach to attack a scary conflict. In the end all is well. nice |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Laying softly upon the beach With heaven’s bodies there to teach You and I in this new world Where chaos finds us hurled And from heaven we are clothed Now in union, now betrothed Oh Walty, give me more! puhleaseeee  I love it m'friend into my library it goes Maree I may know the word, but not say it I may know the truth, but not face it I may hear a sound, a whisper sacred and profound but turn my head, indifferent. Natalie Merchant [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I had missed this one... I like it |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ This is absolutely beautiful ! ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very beautiful...I loved the way you stuck with the basics of rhyming.....brilliant work! Nathan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Walt sweetie, you've written such a beautiful poem here it flowed so gracefully upon reading each verse on screen... A treasure read PoetFriend and I thank you... YUH this rox  Hugs2u ~coco~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh'll've been too kind yuh |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a nature lover's dream....the sea and what an apt decription you did!!!!!!!! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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